Uhh so anyway i got here from your title its the same from an one shot fanfic i like which is also inspired with the same poem, so anyway lets get started first, when i read the fic i have no idea what is happening oh i get the gist of it but that's it, its probably because your lack of more explanation of what is going on?, why did she cry?, Why cu and not other servants or all of them?, The whys in particular is lacking it will probably become really long but its a one shot it could be really long or short as long as its clear the reasons behind it the whys. Secondly, i feel as if the title of the poem could be explored more and not just as a title but as part of the story like a narrators line and for each line of the poem to describe a scene
Exanple:
"Roman!, Where's the spare parts i told you to keep for my-"

Da Vinci stops mid sentence as if lost in thought her gaze softening and turn to look around her.

The room was plain with modern styled furniture it was messy with books and paper everywhere the room was clearly yet to be cleaned, it was quiet with an cold atmosphere usually servants are not really effected by cold because of their spiritual origins yet she could not help but shiver at the cold, she could see him shouting at her for not knocking or talking to his internet idol or even slacking off hiding from the director.

Her smile lift slightly at the picture and finally her gaze stayed to a single chair where he would usually be talking to her internet idol.

"...Even when you're gone you still cause me to worry huh...Roman.." she trailed

Sobbing could be heard as tears start to fall grieving for her loss... A friend

'Do not Stand at my grave and weep'

A faint voice resonates through the room the voice was soft and gentle mqking it hard to hear

ANYWAY thats just an example you could probably do better than me im not that good of a writer. Lastly, you could also describe what other feels like Da Vinci, David, or mashu and not just Ritsuka, hope it helps.

P.S. This scene was highly inspired by the fic i was talking about earlier the title was one of the lines in the poem with "i am the gentle sonething" the author was Arashi Leonheart.

Grand Order need more one-shots of this kind. It does a great deal humanizing Ritsuka, while Cu and Mash are being their usual awesome selves, each in their own ways. Not much else to say, except great job, and keep up the good work!

Oh the feels for doctor Roman.

Can't say that I'm familiar with Grand Order's characters, but the interactions between them all were simply wonderful. I love the way you write Lancer, and that alternate ending was absolutely perfect.

I know how you feel on those assignments (sort of, I can't exactly say a baccalaureate's workload is the same as a Master's, but yeah). Senioritis is the worst enemy. But you did it! That on its own deserves a hearty congratulations.

Very nice all around.