Reviews for Persona 5: A Hazardous Inclusion
Starkller919 chapter 37 . 6/24
I really don't like it when a character like Akechi has to be comically evil in a situation like this, like why does Yoshida have to die all of a sudden? He wasn't in any way a threat to Akechi at any point in the story, consider the fact that this man is a old beaten up former member of Diet, who was previously exposed falsely of money laundering during elections over 20 years ago. You'd think Akechi would keep his blood trail much more cleaner and concise, hell he could've avoided killing Ken and not raise more suspicions about a outside source interfering with the phantom Thieves.
bailey fox chapter 88 . 12/26/2019
Dude you did a wonderful job and you made me cry and appreciate akechi more
bailey fox chapter 88 . 12/26/2019
Dude you did a wonderful job with the story you made me cry And Actually like a catchy more
TheTrueOverlordBear chapter 90 . 12/23/2019
Freaking nuts, it's finally done, huh? I gotta give ya credit for your persistence and meticulousness! That, and your interesting concepts! Most special mentions go to 1) Sae getting her Treasure in the real world and 2) the Phantom Thieves having a rival doing similar work. I'd have added Goro's rewrite, but it feels like a runner-up now, to be honest. That, and wouldn't it have been more fun for Toya and Akira/Ren to have done the final shot on the final boss together? But feel free to take this with a grain of salt, especially considering my experience with Persona 5 canon and all. And hey, I think I can still say that there's something engaging about this, considering how you got me hooked into reading this long ago! You even seem to be on more of a roll with what you showed in those Royal Rewrite plans! So yeah, again, thanks very much for the inspiration, and I wish you more strength and worthwhile times!
bailey fox chapter 1 . 12/22/2019
Good job dude
AaronJI chapter 89 . 12/19/2019
Damn, quite the ending for the fight.
Questions, uh? Of course I always have a few ready.
So do you plan on making fluffy or funny epilogues after the finale chapter?
I definitely want to see a chapter of Toya and Makoto as a couple in ten years as the ultimate Justice pairing, do you have plans for that? (Detective x Police Comissioner ftw)
Is Osiris being a litteral part of Toya give him metaverse powers? Like idk, super jumps, strengh or limited persona. At least I’m sure he gives him angst/tsundere powers.
Do you have a reference or a picture for Ultimate Osiris? i’m intrigued
If I have a great complaint about this fic, It’s probably Akira having a very small influence in the grand scheme of things. In the rewrite, do you plan on making him and the Phantoms more relevant ? Perhaps Toya as one of them instead of an antagonist...
As always, thanks for the chapter. Until next time
AaronJI chapter 88 . 12/17/2019
I can just imagine Akechi paralyzed by Lust while rule 34 flashes before his eyes and he hears a narrator start an Akira X Akechi fanfiction.
His ending was pretty dramatic though, I must admit. Luckily, us readers feed on this stuff so thank you for the chapter
electriuser chapter 88 . 12/17/2019
Akechi died, his death felt unfair in the original game and the feeling that he didn't return was aggravated in ROYAL.
This part was epic, the best currently done in this fanfic and possibly can not overcome.
To get an idea you can compare this death with iron man's death in ENDGAME.
In the next chapter an angry Toya unlocks a new person and defeats osiris, sincerely that part will be predictable.
Well with osiris defeated I guess this fanfic will end unless you include a third trimester.
However this fanfic already closed all its pending plots, all the confrontations that we knew were going to happen passed.
The only thing on the loose is toya.
Does toya already feel satisfied?.A story always ends with the protagonist satisfied, dead or open end. I sincerely bet on the last one.
Toya lost all his family and his best friend, something that a people who obviously are not his friends (his relationship with the Phantom Thief is too cold to be called friendship) a girlfriend who doesn't trust him won't be able to alleviate.
Guest chapter 88 . 12/17/2019
Well at least he helped and kinda redeem himself before he die in your story unlike in the game where he try to kill the phantom thieves with no remorse and his sacrifice seem more like he was trying to escape punishment from the real world (he even say so himself that he will lose all his fame and trust ) than helping the phantom thieves escape I mean they outnumber them and they didn’t look beat up or even tired like Akechi . I still think he should go to prison and face his crime in the real world instead of dying and disappear from the world
FatesAwakener26 chapter 88 . 12/17/2019
I'm wondering what will happen next will it be Akira with satanael or Toya with Osiris and mephisto to finish off Yaldabaoth? I feel like this would be the perfect place for another ishida moment with Osiris and Toya ahnihilating the god for revenge for toya's family and Akechi.
Guest chapter 14 . 12/16/2019
I know this is a very old chapter, but I hope the author will come back and edit it.

He had his protagonist destroy Kaneshiro's camera, and therefore the pictures he took of Makoto. But then he starts the chapter complaining about said picture and the debt they somehow owe Kaneshiro.
FatesAwakener26 chapter 86 . 12/13/2019
I love how this Osiris Saga has ended. It even matches it's name sake. I am wondering though is your next chapter going to be Joker's pov since Lavenza is back? Or are you skipping the Twins fight and Igor being holy Grail entirely?
AaronJI chapter 29 . 12/8/2019
I don’t have anything to say except... nice
Guest chapter 84 . 12/1/2019
His plan sound a lot like MCU ultron plan, overthrowing creator (Tony) and recreate humanity by killing billion
TheTrueOverlordBear chapter 83 . 11/26/2019
Well, considering how Goro's 3rd tier is in Royal, I think this Goro's 3rd Persona is still fair game, especially considering the character differences. Pretty consistent choice with the themes and motifs of Persona 5, too. Now, looks like even more badass is coming, then! :D
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