I agree with the fact that the chapter is really out of control... hermione spilling Harry’s entire life to other girls and the girls not even saying who the lady black is... this not drawing out... this is something else...

You have a good story although it hard to follow at times because of the grammatical errors, I would recommend getting a good beta to go over the story. One thing you can do is change at least 90% percent of the word learn to teach. Looking forward to seeing the progress of the story.

Very interesting story so far please post again soon thanks!

welp im glad hagrid fought and killed some scum before getting away and brought to safety yeah fluffy though

very nice night for harry well it hada rough spot but became super nice

good harry stole the wand before tom could get rekt

is it bad i kinda want when they examine the basilisk that it had an egg in it that just magical sat preserved and harry accidentally hatch it as lord Slytherin
or is that too much also done a decent bit in someway lol

imagining snake face mouldy short's Raging stupid? I'm waiting for it my friend

Harry finally got the Elder Wand! Only the Resurrection Stone remains now, so now Harry has something that can greatly help him against Voldemort and his Death Eaters. I can't wait to see the reactions of the purebloods once they see how highly advanced the Muggle World is :3

Your English is far better than my Dutch. But then, I wouldn't try to write a story in Dutch.

If you want more readers, you probably should try to find a beta who can help you put your story in actual English, rather than a compilation of English words lacking verb tenses, proper plurals, etc.

I didn't read far enough to find out if you actually have a story here, concealed beneath the poor word choices and bad grammer. But if you DO have a story, the work it would take to find a beta would be worth it.

Salutations j'ai adorer lire ta fiction j'attend la suite

ch 1 needs to be spaced out. it is very hard to read it.

You've got to start using " ing " Example "they were seeing them in a new light" not "they were see them in a new light" Example " she is setting on the chair" not she is sit on the chair". There are lots of other problems but at least correct this one as a start.

cool story

Terrific chapter!

Fluffy, Fluffy, Fluffy, I want to seeeeee Fluffy again and have him assist Harry Potter. I look forward to the chaos that Harry and his Harem of powerful women will cause to the forces of Tom. Keep it up.

"Roasted Ron anyone?" Hermoine asked as she looked at the beaten black and blue Ron from her getting her revenge for the potions.

isnt the prison grindelwald in called like Nurmengard castle (irony imprisoned in his own prison) (had to look it up i knew it started with an n) would you not think it is managed by the icw wouldn't attacking it get the entire world after him before he settles off britan

molly and ron are kinda super fucked up huh

so tying house elves together interesting
finally non pureblood find out the truth of elves and now things are better

potter watch shows up in the fic
plans to save friends also yes fluffy Cerberus are cool
im curious when the girls that obviously like Harry that aren't in the pairing yet will be able to confess or spend time with him etc

Thankyou.