"ArE YoU" i love the way you did that lol

Thank you so much for writing this, AND updating! This story is getting good, can't wait for more. Keep doing what you're doing, and you definitely have a consistent fan here

Wait, so if Wirt's stepdad is Andrew "Andy" DeMayo... hold on, Greg's his brother, and Greg is Andy's son... but also his cousin? This is like that optical illusion triangle. I mean, I don't know if you were going for the whole Steven Universe familial thing- ANYWAY. I adore this story to bits, and I can't wait to read more from you!

"Maybe it won't be so bad." Those are famous last words if ever I did hear them.

woah this story is so good. you said it would suck, that couldn't be farther from the truth. I usually leave some sort of constructive criticism about the writing when I review but I don't actually have any. maybe edit the description? but in all honesty please continue this story I am emotionally invested.

:thumbs up:

This story is pretty good so far! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
Your grammar seems fine to me. :)
Please don't get discouraged and stop writing this. You can do it! X)

You have a story with potential here! Sure the second chapter was just a retelling but I'm sure with more and more chapters you'll be telling a unique and amazing telling a great beast!wirt story! The only criticism I can think of telling you is to try to stop thinking about how "bad" a chapter or summery or story is, that'll only take away the joy of writing it! I hope you keep updating and keep writing! Keep up the amazing work!