I like her.
But damn girl, at least gather some intel before killing him lol

Make more chapters plz

Make more chapters

You need to work on your sentence structures, but other than than that I think it holds alot of promise.

Interesting story.

I am interested with the premise, but the grammar needs some work.

Okay, your story is an interesting what if. But I just have a slight problem with your grammar. I'll be blunt with you, it needs quite a bit of work. But aside from that, I'd rate your story 7.5/10.

please your Grammer it hard to read

Hm, interesting concept, but maybe a few scans before posting in the future. there were a whole bunch of sentence errors that made it a little disorienting to read and perhaps be a little more smooth with actions the characters make that way it won't feel disjointed from one scene to another or thoughts to a particular action.

Other than that it is an interesting read, I hope to read more in the future.

Good so far! Just needs some work on grammar. To which I would recommend something like grammarly or even better a editor, which this site has.

Interesting story so far, please keep up the good work.

The last part