Great story, Inever would have thought to combine a Tiefling with a Draconic being before.

Youve given me much to think about please by all that is holy keep writing.

Also if its not too much trouble could you concider a possible 3 way between Ashnod, Casanith and Sara cause that would be HAWT. Im not usually so emotional of forward with things i tend to be more subtle but you have forced my hand due in no small part to your superbe writing skills the dramatic flair and the enthralingly good characters, I am sure i shall read great things in the future.

Sincerly Yours,

Voidmaster

I completely, utterly, and totally disaggree with the reviewer ihavenocluewhoiam. It is possibly an even better story, with the added twist of a gay relationship. I have never seen any problem with homosexuality, and when I review a story, I look for plot, nothing else. By the way, this is the same reviewer who always signed in question marks.

ok the story is AWESOME...

until you added the whole gay relationship.

now it sux...

try and make a big turnaround...

kill off Casanith and pair Ash up with Brenna...

or someone else... (NOT A BOY!)

OMG i just wish that my life could work out that easy. I have no clue what this person im in love with feels, and im afraid they dont feel tha same about me as i do about them. Please hurry and submit the others morgan i cant wait.

I thought this story was going 2 be very good, and for the most part it was, it looked so promising. But then you went and paired him up with Casanith. I wanted him 2 be with his gaurdian angel! *tear*

hurry up and post the rest morgan they are great and im sure everyone else will agree

Okay, I love the ficcy so far. Tieflings are interesting, to say the least. I've never played one, I don't think any of the DM's around here would let me. But anyway, I think Ash and Brenna would make the best couple. She seems to get some enjoyment from Ash's... unique features and since he couldn't bring himself to be irritated with her exitement, they seem like the best match to me. *sigh* man, that was a mouthful. Now, I think it would be nice to have a slightly more detailed description of her in the story... maybe Ash finally really looks at her someday and then you could throw it in there... Well, I'm sure you'll think of something. Ciao for now, you can email me at if you want.

Go on. Keep writing.

Good. Please keep writing

Very cool story.

Keep it comin

redneckman

This is a cool perspective! A Toril with technology like our world mixed with the swords and magic? That's a totally great idea!

Hey! Can't believe nobody's reviewed this yet! The concept's cool, and one I'm sure almost every fantasy fan has ever considered, but so few embark on it. You've got a good style, flows easily, gets the point across whilst still being interesting. Ash looks like an intriguing protagonist, and I'm looking forward to the development of the other guys. Sara amuses me. :) Only other thing I'd like to see would be more of a taste of what Toril's like in the 'future' - it has potential to be great, but also has potential to descend into a mere High-school drama with tieflings and magic (weird Harry Potter). Still, you evidently have a creative brain in there, so I'm quite hopeful. Good luck, and keep writing! (still can't believe this is the first review...)