Thanks

I like how detailed you have made this story making it very easy to imagine as I read. I also like how original this story feels since there are not very many out there on fanfic who will add in their own ideas where some will just copy J.K Rowling’s books and only just change out the main characters. I think you should just continue this story on here and forget the haters, and focus more on your supporters. But I will continue to read this story on Ao3 once it has caught up to the chapters on fanfic so I hope you update soon, good luck.

As much as I like the concept, it is the whole reason I have made it this far. Outside of that the story is so chaotic it is hard to follow. If you could fix that, I would consider finishing but until then I can’t continue to read this...

This needs an editor and more thought in its organization. I can tell it will be very confusing just from this chapter. The road to better writing, however, comes with more work. So I hope you will continue and take constructive criticism as a way to improve.

And... wasn't Tom at gringotts with harry when he was discussing the crystals? And where to find them?

Ok I'm getting REALLY confused now... Harry is in ravenclaw so why would mcgonagal take points from Gryffindor, and Malfoy was put in Gryffindor so why would he be playing quidditch for slytherin?

It’s so..so cliché to have unassuming Harry waltz into Gringotts and find out he’s super rich and talented etc etc. I know this story is complete so I’m not gonna harp on it.

You’ll receive one more review from me on your last chapter. I’ll give you feedback and constructive criticism depending on how the story continues. But as of the moment, work towards going against clichés. Already it feels like I’ve read this story because of this chapter and how similar in design it is to so many others. I sincerely hope you don’t have Harry get a magically expanded trunk that he can live in.

Ok I'm getting confused. in chapter 5 you have Daphne sorted in ravenclaw, and draco in gryffindor. but yet he's always with his sycophants. And here both he and Daphne are at the slytherin table... did i miss something?

Dragons now! This is too far over the top. I quit.

This is all very confusing .

The idea of this story has potential but it’s impossible to follow. It’s seems random characters and plot points have been inserted without fleshing them out leaving the reader to go back assuming they missed something. With all of the source material the AU characters are a wast of time. And you appear to be underutilizing other source characters. You had me at Daphne/ Harry but lost me with the disorganization.

2 things that stop me from reading your story . Harry pairing and the OC Mary Sue knowledge and behaviour .

Way to many nicknames it comes across quite childish.

Felt a bit rushed as well at times it became quite hard to follow or visualise.

ove it! Thx for another amazing chapter! Thx for sharing your talent and all your hard work in sharing your story! Hope more comes soon!Thank you the effort during these trying times. Take care of yourself.

He is kinda right handing all of his business management to his manager is kinda stupid yeah u can trust him but that manager won't be there for you always what if he dies and some goblin or clan (as there are couple of clans making English branch of bank and Warchief leading them but he won't give a shit if he loses it to say Malfoy's he will just focus on them as they are rich he is poor end of story its simple if he says something about it he could just say they are not to blame because of ignorance in finances) who has better relationship with say Malfoy then boom there goes all his money and heirloom's

Mby you should do it in his 4th year in 3rd he gets change of managers and gets mostly of his money blown leave his just with jewels and books plus 1k galleons from tournament as starting capital so he gets less naive :P