Please, continue, 'cause you just can't end like this. It's very interesting and I like to read it. As you can see, it is disappointing that this story just stops!

Update soon, please! This is the first fanfiction I ever read, and it's still my favorite! (I read this about three years ago the first time...) Please continue!

You did...fairly okay, especially when your paragraphing improves in later chapters.

However, I can still see some grammar and spelling mistakes, typos or not, around. So if you are continuing or not, try to edited the mistakes by going through each chapters, one at a time, rereading for any mistakes you've notice. One noteable typo is 'planter' instead of 'planet' when Cloud's dissing on Barret.

Another thing is characterisation, you did fairly well for a few characters, however the majority of them are poorly presented. Regardless if you like them or not, correct characterisation is important unless you have a good reason, which you didn't supply good enough since this is FFVII through Tifa's POV. I suggest reworking on some characters, like Aeris for example, because her portrayal is appalling for most part.

But also, Tifa seems to be self-contradicting, thinking of not-so-good thoughts yet was bothered by Aeris' 'suppose' occupation. And the reasoning behind her outfit because of hospital is just plain bad. I'm sure you can think of a better reason.

Also, there's a little narrative problem during the Shinra Building chapters, like the arrival of Red XI is rather sudden without proper introduction.

Oh and one other thing, change the rating. Because of new ratings, your story has K and unfortunately, K is for 5 years and over, where else your story contain T or, at highest, M contents.

I don't usually go for Cloud x Tifa, but I wouldn't mind helping out with mistakes.

~Pyra Kurai Akaidra

This story shows the true meaning of the term "artistic license." While sticking to the main plotline of the game, you have managed to create a whole new version of the story simply by quirking the characters personalities - and not much mind you. I must say that I am simply all smiles by how you portray Aeris. And personally, I don't think how you described her was too far off either. I believe that you have kept the characters pretty much in context with a few little quirks when you demostrated your artistic license. I am all smiles! This is definitely one of the more interesting Cloti's I have read in a long time and am desperately hoping that you will update soon! Till next time, take it easy!

I read this story over again. And I have to say that I missed out on something I wanted to say. I know this is a Cloti fic and I hate Aeris. But it wouldn't be a bad idea to show some reality on what happen in the game you know. Cause I hate to admit, but Cloud did had some sort of feelings for Aeris. Plus Cloud's and Tifa's relationship didn't go that fast you know. I just think you should cool it down with the Aeris bashing and cool it down with Cloud's and Tifa's relationship. Plus Tifa doesn't hate Aeris she actually considered her like a sister you know so just fix some things k. Overall though great Cloti fic one of the best I've ever read! _

Oh man you have to continue this great story! I love Tifa she's my fav girl character! No one can be like her I mean no one... not even that stupid girl Aeris! Please continue your story is very interseting and wonderful! _Plus Cloti4ever!

I like it! So PLEASE update soon! Hm... and what did that girl mean (with hojo I think) what she told to Tifa... That Cloud isn't what she thinks he is... You've got me hooked! Update!

im going to rewright my review because it sounded abit like a three year I really think you shouldnt make aerith sound so stupid and you shouldnt call her weak because she is a really strong pleaze can you stop making cloud so ooc..well i guess you can do what you want since it is your story but pleaze dont critisize other characters(mainly aerith) just because she is a person people say cloud loves it doesnt mean you should hate her because you know what tifa likes aerith and aerith likes her back and i would say there like best all ill say but pleaze just be like the other clotis ive seen and be nice about who cloud loves or whatever if he loves tifa he loves tifa you can be happy about that but if he loves aerith then you shouldnt care you can be dissapointed but that doesnt mean you should hate it or just be nicer about aerith.

ok...first of all you make aerith like she's a good for nothing bitch..you make cloud act like he is a perverted freak...and you say all of this happend in the game...and you make tifa hate aerith..if this all happened in the game why didnt anyone else c it? this is a really bad fanfic.I would give it a 1/10 only because (im not a clotis or clorith fan)you make cloud act like he had no feelings for aerith (personally i think he loves both of them and if he ends up with one of them he ends up with them!)anyways just try and cool down on making cloud act like an ediot.

I'm sorry, bit I think that you have gone over the top a bit with Aeris being evil. In MY eyes(and I think this is the way Tifa would see it aswell), she is the most caring person in the game, and I don't think Cloud would be cold either. I think Cloud loves Aeris.

Also, the grammar is really poor, and let me just say, that Tifa is not as bitchy as you have made her, and I feel sorry for her, that her character has been degraded by this monstrosity.

This was really funny. It's good to see that you updated. Aeris tries so hard for Cloud's attention and he clearly doesn't want her. LOL! That's what I don't like about her in the game. Well, hopefully you update soon. I'd love to read the date scene. :)

I am so glad to finally see an update, this is a really great fic and I hope to see more of it soon!I love the way you portray Cloud and Tifa's relationship throughout the game. I love the fic so please update as soon as possible!

Ah! *squeals* You've updated! :D This makes me extremely happy! _ I've been waiting forever for this chapter to see what would happen.

I love the CloTi stuff in the story. For me, it's so hard to find any good Cloud and Tifa stuff here. So I really love to read this fanfic of yours.

I was a bit disappointed when you didn't put in the fight between Dyne and Barret. It is part of the story, so I frowned a bit about that.

Other than that, this is coming out lovely! I hope you have the next chapter up soon! And remember, smile and write! :D

It's about time you updated. I was about to lose hope. I started reading your fic a few moths ago. I am really pleased with the quality of your work. It was well worth the wait. I hope the next update comes sooner than this one.

Alright! you updated! i like it. keep up the updates!