great story, I really liked how Bella dealt with Jasper when he was not talking to her and how you wrote Caius's thoughts on the last fight

Will ya continue this story with a sequel? Has Maria been dealt with? Is there maybe an uprising of newborn wars in Mexico or South America that the new Voltori ask the Whitlock Coven for help in solving 5hat?

Fantastic, bloody loved it. Thank you so much for sharing xxx

Excellent

FINISH HIM! FATALITY

I liked this. it was short but good. I liked your characters. I love how you wrote Bella's personality, I liked her putting Alice in her place and Edwards character was priceless..

so far this is great!

Very good story with extremely satisfying end results. :)

However, there were many places where the grammar and wording either didn't make any sense, or was missing something, which made it difficult to gather what was intended. BUT, it didn't take away from the story enough for me to want to stop reading, just a bit frustrating to try to decipher.

With that said, I loved the Whitlocks, all of them. I loved how the Twilight bits were made out as a spirit walk, giving Bella the opportunity to make a new path for herself, which led to surprising and wonderful things. :D I also loved how Jasper reacted to her when they interacted at school... sweet and charming! :) Then, everything flowed relatively smoothly from there, with the help of Old Quil also.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful story. :D

One of the things I like the most, is that both Jasper and the Major are not afraid to show affection to Bella. It’s interesting that Marcus was the leader over Caius, it’s interesting since usually he’s too upset about Didyme.

All in all, I think that Esme and Carlisle got off a bit lightly, but eh. At least they were not part of their lives again.

Great story!

Another brilliant fic that I feel honoured to have read. Much love!

I loved your story. It was so original. You've written characters in a way so different than they are usually presented. It was like a breath of fresh air. It was like discovering a new Twilight.
Thank you.

BEST STORY EVER! Love that Jasper is Bella's "Lobster". Thanks for sharing

I am trying to figure out how they killed the God of War. there are only four of them he, can. take them with one hand and a dose. of fear.

one word: EPIC!