...that aura unlocking speech sounded like a lantern corps speech

This was great and the amount of timeline changes really leaves me excited to see what you’ve got planned next. Soundwave is now in command? It’s like a dream come true! Well, not for the Autobots maybe. Now I wonder what his leadership is going to be? Less tunnel-visioned than Starscream I hope. Also, the kids having their aura unlocked? More durability the potential of their semblanceskids actually being more helpful! I’m really looking forward to whatever your brain has cooked up after your return.

Thanks for having Pyrrha saying "Brothers forbid orbiting Mars". It was a small way to show she isn't originally from america.

Thanks for not having Pyrrha be taken on the mission. One, she can't breathe space. That is something Aura does not protect against. And second, she is injured with heavy aura depletion. Not a great combination.

Wow. Once again, I am impressed with the original show when Optimus said gravitize instead of magnetize. They are from a planet entirely made of metal so it wouldn't make a lot of sense to stick to every surface.

Loved the part where Soundwave had to go to the medic after his mission. Just like the Autobots, Decepticons do get injury and require experienced doctors to patch them up. While not a fatal injury, it is still an injury that needs medical assistance.

Also enjoyed how Soundwave almost feels like he is bragging about Decepticon ground bridges being much more stable than what the Autobots can throw together with human technology and little Energon.

Now the only part I disliked about the chapter was the end with Pyrrha unlocking the trio's Auras. To me, this feels like opening up a huge can of worms. If she can do it to untrained civilians, what's to stop her from doing it to agent Fowler? What is to stop the Pentagon (Fowler's boss) from demanding she unlock other peoples Aura? This is a huge military advantage only humans (and Faunus) can have.

please update please update please update please update please!

Nice!

So will any of her team come as well or just her

Badass

Thanks for sending a PM about my reviews. Only realized and accepted later that Starscream is dead and this is a bold choice to move the story in a new direction instead of following line for line in the story.

Now this is not a criticism of your work and mainly focused on the original series but was disappointing Miko never faced severe repercussions or injury for following the Autobots into a combat zone. The only time it backfired was when they were struck in the Phantom Zone and was a great episode as the events in said episode led to the an intelligent take down of Soundwave. Back to Miko, she felt like the character that wanted to matter but didn't possess the restraint Jack had or the usefulness of Raph.

Loved the part where the humans said Fowler was in the brig and followed with parenthesis "As if a prisoner would be anywhere else on the ship..." The line felt put in there simply to make the humans matter in the plot but not put in an intelligent way like Raph with computers.

Really enjoyed the part where Ratchet quickly listed off Pyrrha's conditions and laid out a basic recovery. This really shows Ratchet to be a great medic but also shows how Pyrrha has been around for a while if he can deduce aura depletion.

Have to say, I loved the interrogation Soundwave did to agent Fowler. As someone who rarely speaks, it can be hard to communicate with him so its great to see this mash up of memes and phrases to get his point across.

Have to say, my favorite part of chapter 2 had to be the part when the story mentioned the holes in the Decepticon drone. You don't tell us if Megatron Starscream, or no one noticed the curious way he was taken out. You leave it up to the audience to decide if Megatron noticed becasuse of his extensive experience in the pits of Kaon or if he ignored it because he thought their was no way human hand-held weapons could harm a Cybertronian.

This is more praise for the show but really enjoyed how Raph had an easier time adjusting to the computers than Ratchet. Ratchet is a medic, not a computer wiz. If you have a cybertronian injury, he is the bot but the tech side of things would probably be better covered by someone like Perceptor. But since he isn't here, Raph is able to show off his skills that benefit the Autobots.

Enjoyed the part Pyrrha has a home in the spartan like military base. It would make sense that you don't want someone who can screw up compasses around a highly populated area if you want to maintain a low profile.

Do hope that Starscream is just out of commission and in the healing area. Felt like flinging an explosion with just your mind was an effective but anticlimactic way to kill off one of the most entertaining Decepticons.

Have to say, I really am enjoying the premise of this story. Pyrrha's last memory was of her death on Remnant. Then a blinding flash of light later, she appeared on another planet inside a transformer. My gripe with this is it doesn't let the mystery sink in. We don't see Pyrrha come to grips with this new world, nor do we see the small but very meaningful bond she develops with Cliffjumper. This bond should be a focus of the story but because this story needs to go eighty miles and hour, it feels incredibly rushed. All we get is a One Year Later time skip.

Loved the action though when Pyrrha used her Semblance to her full potential. We get to see that even if they are made of Cybertronian matter with Energon, their bodies are still under the effect of her powers. We also see her adaption of this world's firearms with a pistol that on its own, is incredibly weak against a Cybertronian. Yet with cleaver aiming where their is less armor like around the neck, and maneuvering the bullets to travel upward to take out the central processor was very creative.

Her flinging a Decepticon drone to hit the ship hovering over the battlefield felt a bit much. I get that she had to do her full power for such an attack but still felt overpowered. Not creative like the previous take down in the previous paragraph.

Also, please don't feel like you need to follow the lore and story word for word. Even the different official adaptations of Transformers changed the lore so feel free to experiment. An example is in the origional G1 Transformers cartoon, Energon can be made from any energy source. Yet in Prime, it is incredibly rare, has a limited amount, and that both sides need to fight over just to survive.

Did enjoy how Pyrrha still wants to continue her education, even if her history of Remnant makes her a bit unsuited to learning about the history of Earth and Cybertron. Though once again, I felt like this was rushed as it could have been so entertaining seeing a model appear in Jasper high and having weird slang and phrases. Like instead of "Oh my god!" or "By the All Spark." she says "By the gods!" A clever reference to the two god brothers from her original home.

This is another small detail but instead of just having a line saying "Scene Change" You do a line across the page then followed by the location (or no information if the characters POV doesn't know the location, time, etc)

Cool and detailed chapter

A pity that the auto bots couldn’t have taken a page out of starscreems book and blown the bridge or at lest unshod up the controls on way out while they were there and had weaken the enimy more like in mobilised the ship so they can find and return easier and didn’t they use a space bridge to get megaton here

This story is awesome and I can't wait for the next chapter also can u please make a transformers prime crossover story and my hero Academia but it should be about shoto woke up in Jasper.

Just started reading this and I’ll be honest you have me hooked... please keep going!