I just found this fic, and i have to say... this has to be one of the best written fic I have ever read, but the craziest story. This plot line blew my mind, and made me feel things I didn’t know I could. I’m without words...

Holy fuck I know it’s been over a year since you completed this story, but you have a fucking talent. This was fucking amazing not just as a fanfic, but as a story itself. It was like you were writing the next best HBO mini-series. You are a seriously talented writer and I haven’t read any of the comments, but from your authors notes in the chapters I know you were give a quite a bit of shit over your use of Karofsky, but I personally think you’re characterization of him was amazing. You have a serious talent in writing that to me it wasn’t even a glee fanfic it was something all on its own. I just want to thank you for giving me these past few hours of immersion into this world of complex characters with an amazing story.

This story was unique. I like the scene in Glee that inspired this story.

This story had a strong start. While I am not a fan of universes where every character is LGBT when they aren’t in canon, I tend to over look that in stories that grab my attention. This one did, right from the start. I had not read a story where Dave an Santana were married to each other.

There were several lines I thought were hilarious. Some were downright clever. I enjoyed the bits of information and mentions of history.

I had questions as to why these two would get married but the reasons were quickly revealed. There were clear differences with how Santana did things and how Dave did things. The story had a good and strong beginning.

Dave, had several scenes where I like him and then some where I hate him. Particularly how he treated Santana and her needs as secondary to his own, but Santana eventually grew fed up with this, too. I like. That Brittany’s arrival was not the only reason Santana sought a divorce. That made this story different. I like that Brittany understood her place in Santana’s life. I was glad to see Santana being clear with her after initially refusing to let Brittany be nothing but a side piece. I liked that she refused to, or more so, didn’t want to sleep with her until she was divorced.

That said, I would have like to see her reaction after learning Santana went to Dani to have a release. Also,I would have like to see Dani and her emotions. They’d had been together for 3 years. Their break up had been pretty emotional. Dani should have felt some sort of anger or frustration or something. Instead they slept together and that was that. There were pictures sent out. I would have liked to see more people get them. If you ever rewrite this, perhaps this could be how Brittany learns about Dani and Santana’s hook up.

David’s death was unexpected. I suppose this is okay as murder is unexpected. So is death, most times. I would have like to see David’s murder. Like no names or faces just the moments leading to it, the moment he knew for sure he was going to die, and him feeling betrayed by this person. Leave the mystery as to who did it, but show us what happened.

I like that you showed Santana dealing with it but also feeling a sense of loss an how she loved a David. They did raise a family together. They were married. While both were gay, they had to feel genuine love for each other. I did feel there should have been more time in her coming to terms with it. We didn’t get to see her be emotionally all or very, very, very briefly. This brings me to my next point.

While the story had a good pace int the beginning, the ending felt incredibly rushed. There was a chapter where we saw an email thread and I felt it didn’t belong. It felt like a foreign chapter. I would try to incorporate this email to develop the Poot like maybe Brittany falls victim to a phishing email and thus explains why she got a virus. Perhaps the filling was the one that sent it and used this to get information about the company for his benefit.

I understand not getting feedback had to do with this as well as the strong dislike by some readers regarding Dave and his marriage to Santana. If you rewrite it, write the story you want to read when you’re done. Include all the details(even the smut scene that might not be everything’s cup of tea).

Overall, I enjoyed this story.

What an epic ending! Thank you so much! I really enjoyed this FF!

Great story!

I have just binge read this...! What a great story... obviously not a typical pairing but you have made it work. I particularly love your character development of Dave... really established a love/hate relationship here.

Keep the chapters coming! You are a great writer

I have just binge read this...! What a roller coaster!

I really love your character development, particularly if Dave. Not a character you warm to, but you actually care and want the best for him.

You are a great writer! Keep the chapters coming! I need to know who did this! And I need the happy ending. Hopefully :)

Wow...didn't see that coming. Another great chapter in a very original story. Can't wait for the next update.

wow I cant wait for the next update, that was great

Eeeep finally San is getting the divorce! Finally Brittana can start to get together!

Will you be updating? Anxious to see how this ends.

Oh that ending... wonder what Britt will think!

Please update soon. This is a great story.

Great chapter! I bet you it is Puck. I can’t wait for Santana and Brittany to get together!

Brittany and Santana may not be together, she still shouldn’t have slept with another girl. If you claim to like someone and would like to pursue something there, you just don’t f**k someone else. So disappointed in her!