Just recently found this story after really wanting more overlord content! Binge read it and im definitely looking forward to more!

Awesome read, gripping and full of good scenes so far...

This is taking way to long bud. Over 120 thousend words in 12 chapters is proof. You should be at 20 chapters minimum I get that you want to build a story but this is ridiculous. Im skipping most of the text and going straight to the dialog because of how over written you are making this.

Genial historia! Pero me encantaría que siguieras escribiendo

I really hope you didn't drop the story, please write more for us :P

Nice story. Just don’t end up being a cunt halfway through like 90% of fanfiction.

I need more please write more

This is a great story, I hope that it is not over.

I just wanna ask, is Ainz and the NPC of Nazarick in this world right now?

Are you ever gonna update this story

A bit OP Robe that can summon a Seraphin of such high lvl. Such high lvl summons normally require EXP to summon. But all in line with Overlord OPness. I'm a bit more surprised Lucifer is not embarrassed saying such corny lines but I guess as an RPer he is used to such things.

Though with all the books It makes me wonder how Cheshire could afford them all. If Ascendance of a Bookworm taught the anime community anything its this: Books are expensive and hard to make without a printing press. Therefore incredibly expensive and domain of the elite. But you know game world maybe some game logic explains it. Like animated quills mass producing books for the masses or something.

I love the fact you adding spelling changes to highlight Svar's rural accent like the "Ser" and "yer". A bit basic to be sure but those little touches almost never happen in fanfiction. Helps distinguish Svar's lines which is always good for character building even if you leave him a bit stereotypical in the end.

Not the best word choice with Svar's calling his wife a bitch though. Though i don't mean I take offense by it far from it. But It probably would have done better with an more archaic insult given the setting. Bitch wasn't used much as a insult towards women until more modern times. Witch could have been substituted easily enough, Hag, or even Crone.

Anyways very much enjoying the story. Which is saying something Since i normally don't bother reading many other Overlord Fanfictions since I started writing my own. A rather fun premise I must say for this AU story.

Good start. Though the dialog could be a bit better.

I mean "Hello young miss." who says that but really really old men or when your speaking to little girls. The protag is supposed to be 20-30 somethings player? Maybe a bit older? Cheshire shouldn't be That much older than him. And that was before he decided to "role play" his character interacting with the girl. It lacks a natural feel to the dialog. Plus the last few sentences is a bit of a mouthful. I had to pause between I'm in while reading it out loud.

A good trick to help make dialog feel a bit more natural is while proofreading your work is to vocalize your character's dialog interactions.

Dude don't drop the story. there are so few good stories on this site so please continue writing lol.
Even a short chapter would be more than welcomed, please keep up the great work.

Please don't drop this story.