Omfg lmao literally "Bit never has she witnessed something as absurd as a royal of the underworld becoming a cuckold" is the best sentence ever 10/10 i love your work i'm currently reading it all please keep creating your smut is S tier.

Awesome story! Can you continue it? Also, can you make a story with just Marco and Eclipsa?

Hmmmmmmmm, I liked this chapter, but one thing isn't sitting well with me. The whole chickenbutt thing, that's more of a Marco thing and had a set up to it. Her liking Marco, maybe hypnotized YEARS ago and something like a trump card for her.

Tom and Janna didn't seem to have much interaction on the show, I really think you should have come up with a spell that Eclipsa had shown her or druged him.

Next, star and Marco walked away from them to have a side conversation about tom's request to watch them. Janna didn't seem to be anywhere near their little plan. I think you missed the mark on that. It just felt so random for her to knock out tom and then wake up next to star blowing Marco.

Not to say it can't happen, but I didn't like how you executed it. Maybe rework that area before the next chapter. It's the only blemish that really isn't doing it for me with your fine story. Here's an idea!

As star and Marco are having their side conversation, they call janna over. They want her insight on this matter, and janna is just a perv saying she wants to watch also and taste. Marco getting all up tight about having a audience, star bringing up that he's not so bashful in his adult form.

Janna then leads on about wanting to see the man himself in all his glory, going balls deep in the half pint blonde. They watch as janna is visibly becoming wet over the idea. Marco tries to say no and put an end to this, but star and janna disregard him as they talk about how hot he is as a man and how it feels when fucking.

Then they come up with the plan, but maybe give it a day or so before it happens. Make some filler with janna hanging out with tom. Star and Marco talking to eclipse about what they should do. Lots can be done to give us a set up AND eclipsa know the time when this will happen.

Her showing up at the end was a nice touch, but why couldn't she be there with them. Just watching and bla bla, anyway, we can talk more about that on discord.

That snowball kiss... Dude... That shit was so fucking hot and evil. I loved reading that over at least 3 times before moving on. I wanted more detail about it, but I was happy with what you gave me. Just saying, I think you can put a little more work into that part to make it even better.

I really thought, when janna was on top of tom's cock, that star wasn't going to let him cum. Without first trying a man cock in his ass, to truly know how it feels to be fucked by a real man. Not trying to make it gay, just maybe like asserting dominance.

Technically, all Marco will see is the back of janna's head. She can hold the back of tom's knees as she sits on his dick. Then tom has one of the strongest orgasm in his life. Eclipsa comes up with some snarky remark about how this bring cuck to a whole new level.

Damn I can really take this down such a dark road! Look forward to the next chapter and we'll chat more on discord!

Say whaaaaaaaaaat? Janna? Where the hell you come from? Okay, okay... Well first to Marco's busted hand. Really cool how you just threw that in there like it was no big deal, and then followed up later on with what happen. I really enjoyed how that played out!

Next to his phone, I can see Janna stealing it and all that... But more for her enjoyment. What I mean is, she more or less hack his phone and made a cloud account. Every picture and video is sent to her and keeps tabs on him.

Orrrrr, she can turn on his crame when she wants, and finds out what Star and Marco are really up to. Then, she confronts them and pretty much blackmails them to be part of their relationship...

Man, I think that would have been a sexy dark way to go with this lol. It was clear Janna didn't have an issue when he was dating Jackie. I can see her liking Marco so much, as long as he's fucking her, she doesn't care who he's with.

I'm just throwing that out there, but back to the story. So janna stole his phone, check. Then she starts to toy with tom and sends him a message, check. Now over to her sneaking into the demon's room and laying the phone on his bed, check.

All this to have demon cum up here ass? I mean, yeah that's cool and all, but I think it could have been done better. I'll give you cool points about how tom seemed to be part of the moment when star and Marco were fucking.

Who knows all the abilities he truly has, okay, okay. I kinda got lost when star was blowing Marco, and Angie came down to check on the dishes. I know there's an island in the kitchen, and Marco was over at the sink. So when he heard his mother, he shot over dragging star's ass on the ground to cover his lower half?

Beside all that, I liked that whole thing. I wish Angie would have poked more fun at them about having sex... Anywho, as you can tell, I'm enjoying this story.

But janna and tom... Eh, it's such a cliche thing now, I rather see tom wanting to stay with star and even so much to becoming marco's bitch, just to make her happy.

Well god damn, getting stroked off by a queen as you see your GF getting fucked... Damn... Tom is damaged goods, and its so fucking good to resd!

But why not dive more into why Eclipsa was doing this? Was she getting off seeing a Butterfly being knocked up? Or maybe feeling a young hot teen rod in her hands?

Idk, but this all went down crazyass sexy, but fuck I want more info! It was great how you went into details on how Eclpisa's voice felt on tom's neck as his short dick was being stroked.

How come we don't know if Eclipsa's panties are wet? Or of she wished Marco was pumped his seed inside of her? You've done a fantastic job on laying out an amazing story, I just love really love lewd info.

It was so cute to see star and Marco coming together, and even more to see Tom cheering on Marco on fucking his GF lol

Fuck I can't wait to read more/!

Holy shit... I've seen that cover art for the story many times, but never thought about checking it out. Fuck I'm so pissed because this was a hell of a first chapter!

Maybe it's because I've just gotten into this kink with Marco fucking Star. While she's with Tom, but you've brought it to a whole new level with Marco in his adult body!

Very clear this wasn't the besties first time, and even more clear that, while Tom is hurt. He couldn't hold back the need on wanting to feel as is he was there with them and stroking his cock.

Eclipsa... You sexy bitch lusting over adult Marco! Dude, that just made this whole thing even better if she tries to take a stab at Marco!

I will say, I was a little disappointed with Marco acting like a surprised teen when Star put the moves on him. But maybe, that's their little game before they get to the good part. Star taking the lead, and then when things are all hot and steamy. Marco flips the switch on becoming a dom and just using Star as his fuck hole.

God damn, so pissed I didn't find this sooner! Call me crazy, but I really want Tom to join them, and get fucked by Marco as hard as he fucks Star. Seeing how his loves Star and seems willing to do anything to stay with her.

Why not have Star tell him, if he wants to stay with her. He needs to become Marco's bitch also. How sick and fucked would that be! Damn man! That's the stuff wet dreams are made from.

A boy wanting to stay with his first love. Her in love with another man and the only way to stay with her. Is to become a bitch to the man she loves as he fucks them both...

I'll talk to you more on discord!

Awesome chapter

Such a story. So weird reading a new chapter of this, but I’m happy there was some kind of conclusion even if it’s open ended in case you make more. Happy writing and I hope to see more of your work again in the future.

I think my favorite thing about this fic is the copious dirty talk about Marco breeding Star, I hope 'Buenos Diaz' can get in on that action too.

We got a load of sexy fun from this chapter with only one question left. Where the fuck does things go from here! And most of all I can't wait for more!

Lmao. Hilarious as always. Seriously this story has made me laugh a lot. I appreciate that xP

Please update more

To be honest the storyline is better than the actual fucking lemons lol but I’m assuming Janna did some magical shit and let Tom know what happened it’d be funny if the plot twist was Star and Marco never Cheated and it was all a ploy by Janna and Eclipsa

I need more!

The condom four of them fantasy thing she talked about is a reference only true Starco porn lovers know