Pretty interesting to show what yang and whitley be like as a couple later. I like the story and it's pretty fun to read and be unique with it.

KO awesome chapter, good thing Batman gave Ruby the phone otherwise she wouldn’t have been prepared for what’s about to happen in Beacon and soon everyone will be on the watch for the Grimm invasion.

Are you planning on making Whitley Robin in this story? It’s just seems nice to see or maybe in later volumes he could take Bruce’s place as Batman and also I like the idea of Whitley and Yang together in this story. Hope you update soon

Whoa whoa whoa whoa! Time out I’m sorry but Yang and Whitley as a couple? NO NO DOES NOT COMPUTE DOES NOT COMPUTE DOES NOT COMPUTE!

I wonder Whitley is going to be like Terry from Batman Beyond when he is older?
Also Great chapter!

Seriously, comma's, USE em.

You REALLY need more comma's in the dialogues.

KO awesome chapter, Batman got to meet the unconscious Fall Maiden helping Pyrrha with her choices and now he will have to solve a little mystery on what really happened with Yang hopefully to clear her name.

OH! Whitley's gonna be Robin, Red Robin, Nightwing, Red Hood, Batwing, Signal, whatever. I can't wait!

Is Whitley Gonna Have The Same Look And Attitude As Damian Wayne

I sincerly tried but it is physically painfull to read. I am not even a native english, but most on the sentences just plainly don't make sense... first paragraph of you first chapter completly contradict the whole point of your chapter, perhaps even your entire fiction... (Probably not a good thing)

"it's not to say Bruce isn't a bad father or anything... quite the opposite". So he IS a bad father?
1 repetition in the first paragraph... "He even blablabbla" "he even blablabla"... try some diversity in wording.
As for the "he was their for her", should berobably be "he was THERE" for her.

I know good grammar and spelling do not make a good story but bad ones... oooh boy they can sure as hell take you away from one.
Also try to stick to one tense. Either present ot past when using description. Not a mix of both. (I am partial for past tense but that's me, then present in dialogues and thoughts)...

Try to get a beta reader to, at the very least, correct the obvious mistakes. Perhaps change some of the sentence structures. Because your idea is interesting, but with 23 chapters and almost 60 k words if that is the first impression your story gives no wonder it doesn't have more fav / subs / comment.

I am not trying to be a dick, just pointing that out. Really trying to give some honnest to good advice from the bottom of my heart here...

I must say, this concept is incredible! Although do remember to put commas in when needed. A lot of the sentences looked a bit rushed.

Cinder probably doesn't know that Batman and Joker are LEAGUES above her

Will we get The Joker?

The boy who would become Robin