look forward to the rest and love your stories thank you

Love it bro. Hope you update this story soon. GMHRIS89 OUT

Dialog is off. Throws me off when reading. Not just grammar but some phrases are unfinished or used in the wrong way.
The whole kidnapping thing was disconcerting in how the dialog flowed. Almost like the people in the scene are having separate convos.
I like the idea of the story but the dialog needs help.
The writing itself was good baring the above.

Hey really like This story, hope to see more, when the next chapter comes out.
Also I really can’t understand people, who goes to such lengt, just to insult you. Glad you’re keeping positive.

this is hella good you should continue you

You need a BETA. Hard to read at times.

Nice chapter anyway.

So, are the female Androids going to be part of the Harem? Like 2B, A2, Devola and Popola?

This is some good shit right here. Can’t wait to see some combat action with the YoRHA units and the likes. Are there still deviants like from Detroit? Will you add new weapon tech?

- I honestly forgot about this story, but reading it a bit brought the memories back. And it's still as a fun read as ever.
- Wait, Naruto's still human? Didn't Sona use her Evil Pieces on him? And if he's still human, does that mean the illness is still going in Naruto's body? So many questions. Well, that's quite the mindblowing statement.

So far this is a great story, loving the storyline. Lots of potential, I can’t wait to read more

Interesting story. Nice pace so far. It has potential. As for the haters that are bashing your story just tell them to fuck of. If they dont like it there are plenty of other stories they can read. I just read one of the negetive postings from Hentai Kamen and i got to say that from what little I just read that guy is so full of shit. I went to check his work and all I got from his garbage was how to masturbate, getting off and other crazy shit. Fucker must have got dropped in the head as a kid a couple of times or he might be some country inbred fuck who got dipped in the family gene pool way too many times. Dont listen to dumasses like him. You do your thing and write on. Dont let people like that tell you how to create literature art.

Is this a human Naruto like human dxd with the possibility of being a mate or is this a Naruto Naruto with chakra?

What did the piece do to him? Durability/speed/longevity? Did any of that get boosted like the devils do?

Great so far

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