good story, but pls don't ship Vader with anyone

Like the story so far, but think that Vader would use more mind control and mind reading abilities, he even has the ability to erase his presence from all the weaker willed minds, only other force trained in the same arts can try to catch the signs and try to see through the mist of the force. But love it other than that, thanks for your hard work.

Shush Sword Maiden!

Please do more

This story is grate

I finished "Star Wars: Lords of the Sith" and Lord Vader isn't terribly hampered by his augmentations. He uses the force very well and stuff and is surprisingly fast and dexterous. I'd say listen to it on Audible.

AWESOME

God damn your writing are REALLY good. I'm hooked to this story and I hope you wouldn't abandon this story until you finished it.

I am very immersed in your story after chapter 5 that I didn't notice the punctuation error.

Holy shit...They way you put the '.' afterlike this ". is frickin annoying.

However, good writing nevertheless.

Just stumbled upon this one; pretty much held my attention most of today. That's not easy to do, so great job!

To get the boring stuff out of the way: While there are definitely grammar mistakes going on, these seem to have lessened in more recent chapters. Like any skill, writing takes practice; that practice helps you hone your skills into a unique style. The written word is a tool and authors wield it differently. There are a few repeated mistakes that break up the 'flow' of your writing(the use of numerals versus written numbers such as '5' versus 'five'; my general rule is to write out any number less than twenty in its entirety), though that is me getting nitpicky.

However, the main tool in a writer's toolbox is the storytelling. I'll admit I lost interest in Star Wars after Episode I came out, but before that I basically devoured the original trilogy and the expanded universe novels. I haven't even seen the recent movies. I hadn't even heard of Goblin Slayer until today, but I think I've got a new series to track down now. That said, you've taken one of the most recognized villains in pop culture history and have set him on a possible redemption arc. At the same time you have Vader walking a fine edge between his newly found spark of humanity and his past as Palpatine's brutal you can hear a character's dialog in their own voice, it's a good indication that you have their characterization down quite well. The plot and pacing seem pretty good, and I enjoy the banter that the other characters participate in.

All in all this is a very solid story and I'm curious to see where this is going!

Ya I agree with what yo said about the Jedi order. Thow they were fundamentally good they had also become out of thought and very elletist . They began to think of them self as better then ever one else. This is show most strongly when they abandoned anicans mother because she wasn’t force scensitv and wasn’t worth there time has well has taking baby’s and just going along with the corropt senate tolled them. The order we see in the old republic seires is mutch difference they are mutch more intuch with normal people and excepting of relationship with non Jedi recruiting older people using techniques envould some levels of pride or righouse anger and some even will to exept the idea of seeking peace with the sith empire and working with some of the better sith win the sicuation demanded it. But after the fall of the old republic both groups went full puritan and that also end the se a group of stuck up coincided out of touch norror minded ass holes

I don't care if Vader has a girlfriend or not.
I came here to laugh and entertain myself with fluid fights, witty dialogues and curiosities.

Good stuff.
I await more as always.

Well actually with Vader’s limited mobility getting past the fire balls would be kinda difficult the comics do show him being held at bay by flame trowers and between being split be the light and dark plus his degenerating cyborgnetics I could see him needing help free. The Conan comics kinda ops him but the canon comic de have Instans of him being injured or overweld by conventional enemies and need help either from troops or bobs. And let’s face it he’s gotten kinda dependent on that force choke witch people seem to be a lot better at dealing with here

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