Well sorry about your loss man, it's really shitty that a lot of people are not taking things seriously.
Well good luck and I guess we'll see you later.

HOTT! Keep going! I think you should’ve had Dash impregnate both girls, and his mom as well, and have all three women tell him that they want him to breed them

Damn I know its pretty late to post a review on this story but I hope you see this. I'm sorry about all the nitpicky bullshit from people but I thought it was pretty good. Not every story needs a goddamn horse cock protagonist, besides 7-8 inches as well as whatever thickness, sorry I forgot what you put for that, is pretty decent for a girl's first time. I'm lesbian now, kinda lol still like dick but not guys if that makes sense, but the biggest dick I ever had was only about 5.5-6 inches but decently thick and I felt like I was being stretched out lol. Just keep writing how you want to and don't worry about negative assholes. If its not constructive its not worth your time.

Enjoyed Hope to see more only complaint story doesn't flow completely

Great story, very hot - I like a bit of screaming in ecstasy from the girls! Well-written, with hot descriptions of the sex. More please.

I love this story so far! Please write more! Fuck those negative nitpickers they don't know what they are talking about.

Kudos to you bro, if people want to be critics they should just look in a mirror and go screw themselves.

Don't get worked up by people like that... and you could just write that he is huge without needin to add a precise number... hope you get the next chaps done...

I like this, but there’s one huge problem with it, correct me if I’m wrong but…isn’t 6.8 average, dude he’s a fucking teenager, most dicks grow bigger when a teenage boy grow and age, he’s not lanky, but he’s not a fucking jock, even with his dam powers he could be bigger. This is just…sad, I’m not asking you to exaggerate his dick size and make it 12 inches, all I’m saying is make it like idk two inches, hell even an 8 inch would be ok. A 6.8 doesn’t get people laid unless they’re into average dicks or they’re just desperate, ok…”desperate” is a strong word to say, the word I’m looking for is…wanting

I think you’re doing great with this! But does this mean you’re just doing this instead of Fast Paced? Or will you do both?

Just ignore the guest reviewers they don't count. I love your stories. I have a great couple for your next story. Zack and Ivy from Where on Earth is Carmen Sandiego.

I,m sorry but 6.8 inches cannot be described as a huge cock. It's average if that and if you think it's huge I feel sorry for any girl you get with.

Holy shit man that was absolutely hot, dash fucking violet and then sending a pic of her gooey pussy to his go Kari to make her go wild again was really erotic, now it's turn of Helen catching the kinky brother and sister going at it a d maybe even Kari hehehe, then she will get all hot and bothered like the rest of us xD
BTW I hope violet was a virgin since that princes dude definitely doesn't deserve to have taken it :v

I love chapter 2 it was great. Keep up the great work. You are a great author.

Hehe. Nice. Real nice. Keep it up!