I'm assuming Silver already knows Kira is an OC and that she's keeping secrets from him about it?

Honestly this is not what I imagined or expected , I thought this was going to be like those long RWBY fic's where Jaune has other job and still ends up in the mix.

What I imagined going into this was your OC/SI was going be one of the top weapon/armor smiths for city of Vale to the point where both sides and others regularly come to his shop.
From there it be a tug of war where both sides try their best to woo him over only for him to say no numerous times.

Instead what I got was a BI-polar insert who has the BS magic of RWBY despite being a GUY, who thinks f**king up the plot just for the sake of f**king with it is fun. Oh and how could I forget the utter overkill sword that steals life engine just by glowing like a night light.

All in all great idea then went straight to crack town followed by jumping off the OP/BS cliff.

"Sigh"

You know most insert stories at least wait till it hits plus 40K words before blowing the secret out of the F**king water. But NO your insert just has to tell some random female he saved the truth of it.

How did he transfer his music from his scroll to hers and then leave his in his place? Why would he even go all the way back to his place before returning her property to her? Did he use the music as an excuse to put a tracker or a bug in her scroll or something?why am I phrasing this all as questions?

? thats retarded.

he didn't even get his dick wet and he's spilling the beans...

Is he like batman?

Oh dear oh dearie me it looks like Mike knows something we don't and it involves Salem and Co. success for know.

I really liked how you mixed Infinity Blade with your fanfic, really loved the game. A shame that it’s no longer in the App Store. :(

Congratulations on making 50 shades of grey look like a masterpiece when compared to your writing. Not even Daniel Benioff, DB Weiss and Rian Johnson combined would be able to subvert expectations and make this story more incoherent and cheesier than it is

Dumbest least though out fic i've ever read, this went to shit the moment kira was introduced and got worse from their.

yeah the whole telling a complete fucking stranger your backstory usually means the authors an idiot.

Suicide jokes? You mean she wasn't talking about hanging upside down from two Beowulves cock knots?

Great story have a pineapple.

You should have ozpin begin the meeting by saying he has thought of a name for it being the ozluminati also neat to hear about the rewrite.

Nice premise also i like all the infinity blade references. Also does each dimension hopped have magic potential?

Good, because like I said, those kind of relationships are fundamentally flawed and never work in real life.