im gonna cry that was so good, i love how kakashi acts around her!

Overall, I'm liking the story. Only thing that irks me, is the Mary Sue qualities Yume seems to be having at the moment. Hopefully, that will sort itself out, because I hate dropping good stories because of bad characterization. Just to iterate, I'm not flaming your story, just offering criticism

Great story! Thank you for writing it

omggg I've never in my 18 years of reading fan fiction have I been so captured and enthralled to stay and finish a story, always on the edge of my seat never knowing what's gonna happen next. thanks so much for writing something so awesome. can't wait to check out any others stories you may have!

Amazing, beautiful, wonderful story. The use of "whilst" bugged me a but, but the story is perfect and I love it so much. 10/10

I'm going to set this one down here.

At this point I've mostly just been skimming the last line 60 chapters.

While this had potential in the beginning it didn't really end up going anywhere.

When you introduce an OC it should matter. Maybe their impact in the beginning should be minimal but as the story goes on the divergences should become larger and more important. The only thing Yume adds to the plot is fluff and her Mary sue dragon stuff. Otherwise this is just canon Naruto.

Good read to pass the time, I liked it a lot! I would have loved for a slower pace, but I understand that would be wayyy to much. I would love to see more of the next generation too, but not here. This story is completed, and that’s great. If you were to make a short sequel just jumping around of the effects of Yume and her life, I would enjoy that. This was a little bit of a stretch, but I read it all nonetheless. Great job for actually writing this all, it takes a lot.

Loooooooooove this!

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beautiful.

Guess I should have read further into the chapter before posting a comment... You, the unsuspecting reading, probably think this means I'm retracting what I said, in a sense you aren't wrong, but it's my last comments that is being retracted. I will be stopping here for this story, placing a seal on Yume so that she couldn't mention anything regarding Kurama or Naruto's parent completely and utterly killed all the positive feelings I have garnered for this story. Good day!

So us, the readers, are to believe that Minato would still seal half of Kurama within himself while Yume was around? Ridiculous. Not to mention that Yume would have been capable of having the whole of Kurama sealed within her as Kushina did. Have enjoyed the story til this chapter, but this chapter was sorely disappointing. I will continue to read, just wanted to express my thoughts.

Goodness Gracious. That didn’t come out as I wanted it to, but you get the point.

My question is how are you able to make a 410k story within only 1 day?._.I’m not dumb. I know how this happens). xD