Honestly I’m really excited for the rewrite while I loved this one it felt quite clunky and confusing but either way this still turned out very good
Because of the way you spinner these characters we know and love and turned them into almost entirely different characters while also introducing new characters this is probably one of my favorite story’s on this app also I’m the man behind the review

wait...pyra died?

Have you abandoned this?

Hey you your finally awake. They caught you trying to cross the border to huh

Holy shit. I just came back from a 4 month break of fanfiction and this. THIS is so much better than I remembered.

its all good dude just take your time and dont stress your self out

Dude we don’t care how long it takes just live your life however you want to.

The pace is a bit rushed...

Ok, so i've never read any other fanfictions, this is probably the first and last i'll ever read, but i'll say this. This is one of the best stories i've read in my life. I never liked how they did Nia so dirty in the original XB2, and i feel like adding Brandon to the story improved it so so much, he's an amazing character with so much potential with his relationship with Nia. Since you did your own new chapter apart from the story i really really hope you continue the story after the game's ending, make your own villains or whatever, i just would love to see more of these characters in general, good luck with college and i hope you find success in the future because your potential as a writer is incredible.

HOLY SHIT just read this at 6:00 dying of sleep deprivation but it is worth it

Leave it to Brandon to see that Jin just hasnt moved on

Ha this coming from the girl who didnt know what “one eyes monster” could mean ... btw did Brandon ever tell her
Well now he can scavenge for parts for automail at least

Well shit time for automail

an ok chapter. but sadly u won't get my interest on StarCraft since I don't really like those type of games. If it were Warframe for example, I would check u out at least.

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