Well damn.. I am quite taken with this story, it genuinely saddens me to be at the end so soon. That said I truly appreciate your authorship. The layout of plot and dialogue are quite interesting. I think I would have enjoyed some more of your refreshing humour throughout, though I understand there is a suspenseful ramp up near the end chapters with teenagers planning war and all. Honestly that is all I can offer as constructive criticism, so I would thank you for the time put in and sharing a great piece of writing.

Nice Chapter.

Intresting . Love not worrying about there engagement the wizarding world are mostly in medieval to Renaissance time so its not surprising . Anyway love cant wait for more.

A bit unrealistic that Daphne would win a championship considering she has been training less than a year. Rookies can do well but usually experinece will win out. In my mind it would have been better to have her make the medal stand-not in first place.

It gives me the creeps to read about two 14 year olds being "in love." Really? And now they will get engaged? Yuck. Pairing someone up at such a young age is dumb and in the real world-not likely to last.

Great story so far, keep it up. Looking forward to reading more

Right... cuz it’s not like Neville has a perfect match already. People like you have to pair him with Susan. Hannah already fits him so well. From everything that we know about Susan from her background to how she comes off in your other stories her and Neville are weird together. I can’t believe I’m still seeing signs of this pairing in this day and age. The soft spoken boy with the courage of a lion pairs perfectly with someone whose nurturing and willing to stand by his side. Susan has something about her that she gets from her aunt (you know, the head of the DMLE) that’ll clash with Neville’s background. Why fix something that isn’t broken. Harry I agree with. He has the personality and the background that lends to him being able to be paired with different types of people. Especially when you take into consideration the kind of future he’d want. Politics? Daphne. Quiet life? Hermione. Auror? Susan. Healer? Anyone. Adventurer? Luna. Crazy family? Ginny. Professor? Hannah. Neville’s personality leaves him with three viable options: Hannah, Hermione, and Luna. These three would support him in a way that he needs through thick and thin. Even in this story which you catered to set him up with Susan, it still feels off and wrong. Please think about your pairings before writing. As someone with a job in couples counseling it pains me to read a lot of these stories where the author doesn’t fully think about the characters as a person and how that’ll affect the relationships. Because what I’m seeing is long nights at the office while the other is too busy to think as well. Leading to a clash in about fifteen years where they go to someone like me and spend thousands of dollars trying to “make it work” only to have a “temporary break” where they need to “find themselves”. I have only seen that work once in my eight years of doing this. And that ended with one of them having to give up everything in their career and go back to school. Haven’t heard from them since December.

I am sad they couldn't be married right now instead of engaged. :(

Nice. Good luck on your muse! I'll check out your other stories

Nice

nice cliffy

Ron bashing is accepted

adult dialog appreciated though dont overdue it with 14 year olds...

Interesting

Glad to see you updating again! Excellent chapter! Enjoy how the plot is developing. Using Draco to start the DA... That is a neat twist. I like how everything was logically laid out and flowed from there. Also enjoy the overhanging suspense that Voldemort's threat poses. Can't wait to see what's next!

please update immediately