where the next chapter?

Superb chapter, leaves you wanting more and more and more! Just found this story and loving it loads. Please continue it.

The dialogue is extremely hard to follow. Sentences that have to be read several times to make sense of them, poor choice of words and subject changes that have no rhyme or reason. It also seems like you don’t actually know much about the Harry Potter world. You called him Remus ‘Lupine’ twice, meaning it wasn’t just a typo. You wrote ‘stupor’ when he used the stunning spella mistake that I have literally never seen made.

I like the concept and like the story itself, it’s just that the writing is terrible.

I just love this story it's a wonderful piece of literature ly fanfiction. Only problem I see is it's not completed.

Sorry but you really need to go through this whole story again to fix the constant typos and word choices before the story can even be called readable.

time to re-start this story back up

Hve seen a couple of these now. Interested to see what twists you put on it.

I can’t read it. Harry jumps from one emotion to another in an instant over the smallest bloody things. You lack even the most basic understanding of the English language. You somehow make it seem like eight different discussions are going on at once since the responses rarely match the questions.

Like I said, it hurts my head.

The story is interesting and the progression isn’t bad. But the actual writing is.. it hurts my head.

More?!

please update immediately

Thank you for sharing this wonderful story.
I am really looking forward to seeing how the story develops.
Keep up the good work.

reported for plagiarism; everything, even the summary, is just badly translated from Heiko 2003 's Harry Potter und die Lordschaft von Scyde (id: 2374930)

rewrite this

This needs intense revision, read the story aloud before posting. Rewrite and try-again, you'll get better with practice.