Updates, viruses and quarantine, oh my!

Good chapter, and I do hope you'll update this story more than once a year ;)

Fuck off ugly, Ash is with may now

Another great chapter! Though I don’t share Zoeys opinion on the police, I have to say, the police in the Pokémon is... suboptimal, to say the least. Anyway, looking forward to the chapter, be it on this story, or any of your others! Stay awesome!

Well, consider myself interested. Even though I am a Pokémon fan and am more-or-less familiar with most of the franchise, one aspect of the franchise that I greatly enjoy would be the Mystery Dungeon games. So seeing you tackling the anime with characters from said Mystery Dungeon games (specifically the player, partner, and Absol from the first set of games) certainly tickles my interests. I quite like the subtle nod to the PMD games using capital letters for giant Pokémon with that Gyarados (assuming it was intentional), and hearing about the few references about the PMD games is amusing. Consider myself a fan.

Though I do wonder what Zoey is trying to accomplice trying to anger a police officer. Oh, and mind elaborating on why she's not a fan of police officers when she herself is a Rescue Team Leader that pretty much does the same thing in the Pokémon world?

I don't know if it was meant to be or just a mistake on your part when Ash say "But that was so cool! How your pokemon handled all those Pidgey with ease" at the start when Zoe came back from talking to Blaziken and Absol when he said Pidgey when it was Spearow that attacked. Beside that, I like the idea of the story as a whole (and the fact that it's the characters from a mystery dungeon game (and the human from our world) inside the anime is a big bonus on my part).

Well she might have no more of a complete resistance to Pokemon attacks but maybe you could give her some of it as I read in another fanfic called Pokémon Sun and Moon: Soulstorm that involves a PMD human and partner Pokemon Absol that starts in Alola and while not immune did make it through a Z Attack unintentionally from Ash's Pikachu.

"They didn't know humans couldn't endure the attack of a Pokemon"
... I do wonder... How much does that differ for humans of the anime's world? Ash can endure Pokemon attacks just fine (... and fight back if he really needs to). He's not quite a normal human, but he's hardly the only character to do this stuff.

"At best humans can only interpret what we're saying."
Zoey may have been a bit misleading in saying that. It's rare, not unknown; and that interpretation can go pretty far. Ash understands quite a bit more than he lets on, and doesn't make a big deal out of it... That's something I can imagine possibly coming up. Or, y'know, Meowth overhearing stuff.

Also Catastropika. Heh... Not quite the exclusive Z-Move THIS Pikachu is going to be learning. 10,000,000 Volt Thunderbolt doesn't exactly exist until Ash and Pikachu use it, though, so mentioning it would absolutely be spoilers. If she even knows.

Hello! I read through these two chapters and think I'm going to talk about one thing that I felt could be improved and three good things I found in this story so far.

What Could be Worked On: A lot of things happen without many events occurring. Which is a weird paradox, but to me the story happens very suddenly without no warning in the least as things move without a moment for breathing. Zoey sort of lampshades it with her needing to take the pair away to talk at the end of chapter two, so I can see it may be intentional, but it is a little hard to follow at times. In the end, only two things really happened. Zoey and her pokemon partners arrived in the anime world, and they screwed up the Ash defending Pikachu moment that sparks their whole friendship. I must say, I applaud that. That was pretty crazy to see.

Which leads to the good stuff.

First Good: Daring. The whole premise is something I haven't seen before, but I'll discuss that more in another one. What I want to focus on is mostly Blaziken and Absol stopping the Spearow. First, I liked how the attack was presented as an overkill action, possibly alluding to how pokemon are differently powerful in the Mystery Dungeon world. Second is both the plot ramifications, and meta aspects to it, that I really liked. First, that moment was the bedrock of Ash and Pikachu. It is what gained the disobedient, snarky, shitty little prick that Pikachu is, firm loyalty and friendship to Ash and what also taught Ash part of the meaning of being a pokemon trainer. He values them greatly, and he KNOW'S how much he values them thanks to that act. Sure, he cares for pokemon in general, but I saw that action as showing even to himself what pokemon really mean to him. So this is going to be interesting past this. On a meta scale, it shows to me that this is an author willing to take bold moves and interesting risks to shake it up. Zoey, clearly has watched the anime, and knows how incredibly important Ash's role is in many future events, many of them being world-ending catastrophes. So yeah, this makes me eager to see what you're going to do with it.

Second Good: Zoey, Blaziken, and Absol. Right from the bat I feel like you presented the three of them with distinct and unique personalities. Which is always good to see. Zoey in the 'real world' was of particular interest to me as I didn't realise you were going that angle with a PMD protagonist since they generally seem to be implied to be from the pokemon world anyway, just ones with the humans and pokemon. The fact she's from the 'real world' makes things super interesting and also makes me wonder if she's played the Mystery Dungeon games AFTER she returned. I bet she has, since she's watched the anime. I wonder how she felt playing that game, did she reset until she got the pokemon she was? Or was her answers to the quiz natural enough she got it anyway. What was it too, I noticed that seemed to have been avoided. I also wonder a lot about why she was so certain what she went through was true, did she ever doubt due to everyone telling her she was kidnapped? How did she deal with losing them, but also regaining her family? How's she going to deal with losing her family AND friends (who I kind of thought Lunala was going to grab too for some reason) along with people who have recorded the event since you mentioned the likelihood of that happening? SO MANY QUESTIONS THAT I CANNOT WAIT TO LEARN THE ANSWERS TOO!

Third Good: The... plot? Set-up? Angle you're going? Hard to put words to it exactly. This was mentioned in the First Good, but was so big I had to add a third part to this to discuss it. I have never seen this idea done before. It probably has, nothing is truly original anymore, but I personally haven't seen this exactly. PMD protagonists going to the anime world I may have seen once or twice, but PMD protagonist from the FIRST GAME, back as a human, from the real world, going back to the pokemon world, and ending up still human with her partners and in the anime world? Never seen that, and that idea is so damn exciting! There are some ideas you haven't seen before because they are too flawed to bother trying to work with, and yes this one has its own flaws as does every idea, but I think the positives far outweigh it. This is so interesting. We've seen SI's and other OC's from the 'real world' being put in the anime as either Ash or a companion to Ash, but never someone who has BEEN a pokemon first! It's just so weird and amazing and I love it.

Overall, I think I should stop gushing. I'm supposed to be all 'This is the good AND the bad' and give fair points to each. I will mention here that you use some strange speech tags, it was more noticeable in chapter one and most of them just made me laugh. Probably a bit mean, it wasn't mocking laughter, but it wasn't not I suppose? But nothing so severe I thought it was a problem. I avoid talking about grammar and stuff because we all know there are plenty of people to do that already. Anyway, I'm rambling again, it happens when I really like something and want to talk about it. Okay, overall I think this is an exceptionally interesting story, a huge amount of potential, and I wish you all the best in your writing endeavours!

A magnet for trouble? He's definitely that. And then some. That'll get interesting. And with Lunala... I'm already imagining some things that could happen.

... Well, maybe the only human that can understand Pokemon word-for-word. A good number of characters can understand them to varying degrees.

You have likely several warnings about Farla already so why did you let the troll review?

I straight up warned you via pm days ago.

[Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said.]

Dialogue is written as "Hello," She said or as "Hello." She said. Farla know nothing.

Block Farla they are a troll.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Also please just use said.

[she asked in a sarcastic fashion]
[Zoey asked in a rhetoric fashion.]
[Britanie asked in a half-serious fashion.]
Sarcastically, rhetorically, half-seriously.

A warning seeing how your starting a new Pokemon story. Be warned of St Elmo's Fire, and Farla are the Pokemon fanfiction bullies. There is literally not a single story on this site that doesn't have his nonsense review. He claim everyone who opposes him are nothing but one user who stalks having nearly the whole fandom against him. Furthermore all the proof is on my prolfile including St getting removed by the admins.

He the one stalking the Pokemon fandom by going to its category and only targeting the new writers effectively destroying them from writing in a degraded attempt to destroy the fandom.

Please block him for yourselves. He's untrustworthy. Watch he's going to post some nonsense about "sock-puppets" as he's that predictable and is well known lair.

Hell, he's even going to say this bullcrap [KingPyle is a sockpuppet of lstwill56, who was banned on my sister's forum for using racial slurs and is now spamming the category as revenge.] or the even more crazy nonsense {Sockpuppet of Hybrid of Fate}

Which is funny as Istwill got removed for being a Neo-pagan while he is friends with an actual fascist.

Oh and if he goes on about this [ see you've been visited by KingPyle. My condolences. Authors have continually told her to stop doing this but she just won't leave people alone.]

Trust me I won't have to put those two unless he didn't put them in his reviews because he can't take no for an answer.

Plus, I have written a story and shown him that I'm not but he chooses not too.

He's been told to leave people alone and even made up the sockpuppet nonsense in a desperate attempt to discredit those that tried to stop him. Which is rather petty of him but hey he's a pathological liar.

His review will start off with a nonsense of him giving out constructive criticism when really its all flames. Then maybe he'll move on to you summary, or talk about the nonsense of Pokemon nanes, dailogue or some other nonsense. Best to block him before it happens alright.