Hope you get better

Ah yes more quality content, thanks

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Well hot damn, this went from zero to a thousand real quick.

So he basically has blacklight

I have one regret after reading this story... that I didn’t find it sooner. This is very good, excellent even! You’ve found yourself a dedicated reader here. I love the incorporation of Prototype into this fandom. It works so well! It does raise a few questions but ones I won’t dwell on. Personally I want to see what happens next. The Fang, Grimm, and Salem are closing in on a likely berserking Jaune. It’s left up in the air if it’s whit or Jaune doing the growling and posturing both would be an interesting take. Is whit back and working with Jaune or has Jaune been exhausted fighting on his own and whit is just controlling his body. Worse still is Jaune the only one fighting but lost himself to his power and fighting like a Grimm. I cannot wait for he next chapter... but if this site taught me one things it’s patience.

i think you should of made crazy neo x jaune

I could concede to that point. While armour is quite agile, much more so than most people think, it does slightly inhibit movement in, though only ever in a couple degrees. You'll still have most of your range of movement, but it will obviously not be as much as not wearing it. Sorry about the aggressive tone I had in the previous review, I'm quite sick of how most people portray armour in their fics.

i just binged this.

great work. I can't wait for more.

loving the first chap but I gotta point out a little plot hole.

Jaune was mentioned to be 2 years older than his 5 year old sister.

7 years old. there is no way Blake was 7 when the train incident happened lol. she was like 16-17 as it was a few weeks to months before beacon.

other than that the plot point here is super unique and I'll ignore what happened however You may wish to adjust that to better fit a timeline... maybe use Sienna Kahn to do this?

also at this point in time the Faunus were still doing peaceful protests. regardless of the plothole its well written and moving back into it!

I feel sorry for all of the poor souls who will filter their fanfiction by 100k words today and miss this masterpiece by just one word.

noice.

"Flash of white struck with an agility that shouldn't have been possible in a full suit of armour." No, just, no. If a suit of armour was so clunky that it left the fighter unable to fight, if it was so clunky and slow that knights became nothing more than glorified turtles incapable of killing, do you really think they would continue using armour? Do you really think they wouldn't just ditch their armour as soon as they had the chance? A warrior, especially a knight, works out WHILE wearing their full suit of armour, not just to get used to the weight, but to improve their stamina and develop even more muscles than usual to compensate. A properly equipped and trained knight will swing his sword or polearm even faster than your militia peasant in "light" armour, so no, that kind of agility WOULD be expected from a warrior wearing a full suit of armour.

Why did he spare the chick? The life of a huntsman calls for you to kill other people as well as who the fuck lets a person live after they just tried to kill you, sorry but that's not how remnant 's a kill or be killed world and there's no way in hell he would just let that chick live.

The chapter is a bit short, but that’s understandable given it’s merely a set up chapter. You also work night shift, so between that, creating/keeping social bonds during the day, and some R&R to enjoy yourself you must be tired by the time you begin to write. I have noticed your proclivity towards powerful characters, which is something I agree with. To an extent at least, I’m sure everyone reading this comment has read/watched something where the protagonist is the be-all, end-all immediately with a flimsy reason at best. Those are the stories that make me want to find who wrote them, go to their home, and move all of their furniture 2” to the right so they repeatedly stub their toes. Thankfully, you’ve done a good job of power scaling as well as writing realistic personalities/character depth. You’re welcome for the review/analysis, and thank you for responding. A lot of authors ask for feedback but don’t respond via AN or PM - many of which don’t have any excuses since they aren’t Coeur levels of popularity and get hundreds of reviews each chapter - irks me since I usually put 30ish minutes into every review at the least. I enjoyed reading this chapter of GC, and you did not disappoint.