Well this looks interesting. Will be following it closely to see how it pans out

(Chapters 1-4)

At first I was like "Hunter raises newborn monster? Seen that before." But then strange things started happening. :-P

As 7sky pointed out, every time someone else speaks you should start a new paragraph. It's easier to read, and grammatically correct.

Chapter 1 was a bit of a mess. It's good that you cleaned things up with later chapters. (You may want to go back and clean up chapter 1, so first time readers aren't put off.)

I feel things move really fast in this story. You may want to slow things down and take time to describe things, use imagery, etc.

a thing you need to do is make a new paragraph for every time a different character speaks. It'll make things easier to tell who is talking, also it just looks best. and is grammatically correct.

another thing is, put some more detail into the story. Describe to us what you see in your imagination. don't just tell us, show us. it'll make your story far more appeasing.

now, I did quite enjoy this chapter. A coward lives and dies a coward so it was nice to see that one go. Also, why didn't the odogaron attack her? you didn't really explain that. if he was hungry enough to attack her in the first place, then words alone would not be enough to stop him.

Ok so the transformation is new to me. Gotta say I dig it. I do also find it sad that the rathalos didnt have a rathian with the eggs meaning she had died. I will say that this concept is interesting and I look forward to what she has to fight next.

so many curve balls my head is falling off. i have no idea what to think on this and i love it. You brought in nergigante as well, btw that's my favorite, so now i'm super hooked. so hooked that if it was removed it could cause physical problems(physical problems sold separately). Looking forward to what is next.

could of sworn i left a review, but i'll leave one now, i really enjoyed this chapter. i wasn't really expecting anything like this and i definitely look forward to future chapters.