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Can't wait for the re-write of The Fox turned Neko!

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Issei is my favorite character in dxd, and I don’t dislike perverts in the story.

Naruto in this story might as well kill himself for his hate of perverts since 90 percent of males in dxd are huge perverts this include every race including Nekoshou.

Youkai are as a perverted like any other race so Naruto is a hypocrite in his reaction true Nekoshou are faithful to their lovers but all Youkai willingly practice Polygamy.

Sigue

I'm liking this very much and I wonder how everyone is going to take it when they find out the truth of his past and I like that Ahri is in this.. NarutoxAhri is one my Top five Narutox? pairing outside of the Naruto universe alongside NarutoxKuroka. Well anyway I can't wait for the next post.

Definitely enjoying the fun so far keep it up

Can't wait for the next chapter.

The that part where it said “he whispered huskily” had me disturbed on so many different levels...ya I’m gonna drop this, hope the story goes well for you though!

The grammar needs some help. Otherwise the story seems pretty good, I don’t know why your going down the incest route though?

Well... on one hand, this story feels very rushed and like it starts in the middle, backstory points are just mentioned as if the reader was already supposed to know about them. Basically, it is telling instead of showing, something everyone with writing experience can tell is to be avoided in most cases. Also, while Naruto is reincarnated the narration seems like he has the exact same power as endgame Naruto only with cat ears and tails, instead of, you know, having to slowly retrain everything.

But... I can see potential in the story. So I'll try to keep following it in hopes the good parts that draw me in get even better and, hopefully, the parts I mentioned harm it are improved upon later.

I wanted to read this story but I couldn't go 2 paragraphs in before getting a figurative aneurysm in the head with how bad that sentence was phrased.

Let me show the full sentence and break it down.

"But our focus isn't on them, no it is on the two students walking from the main school building their their club room building which used to be the old school building."

First of all it is "But our focus isn't on them." full stop.
"No, it is on the to students walking" now there is a pause for "no".
"from the school to their clubroom, which is where the old campus for the school used to be." no more "building this, building that, 3 times in a row."

Putting it all together the sentence would look like this

"But our focus isn't on them. No, it is on the to students walking from the school to their clubroom, which is where the old campus for the school used to be."

Much cleaner isn't it?

I will give this story 2 more strikes, if I get em, I will drop this and just do whatever else.

great chapter.

Ohohoho its Ahri!~