I don't understand why you limited his magic. It seems like you just gave him Earth magic, and took away everything else. Kinda hope you'll give it back to him, because it feels like a nerf, just so that you can build on something completely different. Why? What's the point of pulling a character from somewhere completely different, and rearranging their whole being to fit with the place they're in now? It completely disregards what they had gone through before, and breaks the progression.

I'm seeing this... harem thing that you've written here in the authors note, and I'm cringing away from it. I vote no harem. They always suck, because it just ends up being people falling for the MC because they exist. Nobody knows how to write a good polygamous relationship, and I really doubt that you're the magic person to do it correctly. It's a fantasy trip for lonely people that want the world.

I freaking hate harems. Please don't do that.

Outside of that, the story is decidedly in the "OK" category. Decent plot so far, characters are represented well enough... it just seems that you're trying too hard to implement things that you want to happen, with only tangential respect to if it's feasible, or reasonable.

Do you have something against 'C's. "Kondition," "Kare"... why use "K?" This spelling mistake is baffling.

Oof, so many spelling mistakes.

Decent story start, though.

Don't add Namine

Excellent chapter! Ooh? So you’re gonna do each arc of this story in volumes eh? Cool. I like that idea! Really makes this more of a unique story! But I digress.

I was wondering how much longer Xion will be keeping things from Roxas? It’s kinda upsetting to see that she’s still being so secretive. If I were her friend, I’d know something was up and wouldn’t stop bugging until I knew everything was alright. Even if the knowledge could hurt. Either way, I’d still be her friend, no matter what. Basically what I’m saying, is that to me, Xion and Roxas are very close. Closer than any Nobody/Somebody could ever be in my opinion. And it just hurts to see that one of them is keeping a deep, and possibly dark, secret for so long. I know I’m ranting, but that’s just how I feel. Nonetheless, I still hope the truth DOES come out. In time.

I digress again though.

Future Heartless problems? Ooh boy... beware Earthland! You shall soon know the threat that is the darkness of the Heartless! That makes me wonder...what would Zeref do if he encounters them? *shivers* I’ve a scary feeling!

Great chapter! So, Xion and Roxas are gaining hearts?! But along with something else? Hmm...I can only wonder what else has been "added in the package" so to speak. Nevertheless, I hope that this will all go okay and they’ll finally be Somebodies!

WHOOOOOOO! Loved this! Great work! I was worried about those mages doing something really bad, but thank heaven that Ultimecia intervened!

I must say, your stories are really interesting but you really need to proofread your work, seeing as some sentences are unreadable, your grammar needs a lot of work so before you upload a chapter I would recommend reading it.

in the Harem of Roxas you could add apart from Xion like Mirajane, Lissana, Cana, Princess Hisui, Flare and Kagura, in addition to seeing Roxas and the members of Fairy Tail traveling to other worlds of the Multiverse of the Anime to face the Heartless.

Yes yes YES! This was great! I loved reading it! I hope to see more soon! I agree with you though. Roxas and Xion do need a place to stay. Hmm...perhaps an apartment like Lucy’s? Although I’m sure they’ll need help finding a cheap one. Or what about having them make their own with their unique set of skills? I’m sure that would be possible. They could make a log cabin of sorts and live near the forests of Magnolia. Whatcha think?

Anyway, lol. Poor Xion. The new heart she has must really feel foreign to her if she’s losing control of her emotions so much! Lol. But she’s gonna have to deal with it until she gets her own heart down the line. She will right? Roxas too?

Either way, see ya next update! I can’t wait to see more! Till then! Also, please lemme know what you think of my housing idea.

wow. this is good. now I'm going to see if you're out of your hiatus. other whys I would ask you if this would get updated.

LOVE IT!

I do not like that xion keep secrets to roxas after all that talk about that the lies almost broke their friendship and that's why they were not going to lie to others she should just tell him and explain what is happening roxas always remains in the dark of everything...

Wow! Excellent chapter! I loved it! I especially liked how you had Xion keep her Armored Form when she fought Roxas in 358/2!

Anyway, I’m also glad she can control it as well without fading. That would’ve been bad if she couldn’t and DID fade!

But I digress. I hope your hiatus goes okay and that you’ll update again eventually.

Till then!

Put Aqua in the harem please.