The opening paragraph was great and well written. Then it went downhill from there. Average grammar, using 'boss' instead of chief, calling Arbiter as 'inquisitor' and ignoring the fact that anything larger than the gate won't fit in. Plot is kinda good but grammar needs more work.

Yeah, ONI wouldn't send Spartans to deal with a bunch of pre-industrial barbarians. Forget the Visegrad relay, that is a gross misallocation of resources. A MJOLNIR suit costs as much as a UNSC Destroyer Starship. Maybe a few headhunters would be called in and other Spartan 3s using the cheaper SPI - Semi powered Infiltration armour, since their superman strength and speed would help in subduing and scaring the locals, while their active camouflage would with assassinations and such, but nothing beyond that would be sent there while the Covenant is still at large. Probably ODTS wouldn't even be sent in since the UNSC army forces would be more than sufficient, heck a few pelicans and Longswords could probably slaughter the entire army within minutes. A pelican and Longsword are capable of SSTO, or single stage to orbit with ease, they both use nuclear fusion and are heavily armoured, you could probably kill a fire dragon by ramming it with a pelican.

Especially since until they can locate the other side, which may not even be in the same galaxy or galactic arm, they can't have easy access to orbital support, which means anything larger than an Elephant which is the largest they can fit through the portal, will have to be built on the other side. Pelicans and Longswords could be used to construct a space dock, but considering this is Reach the primary dockyard, anything they build will take away from resources to fight the Covenant. So I would suspect one Charon Frigate would be built either on the surface or on orbit to support ground operations and for morale. The main reason ONI would have is that if the Covenant come they can evacuate citizens or soldiers on planet reach through the portal, but considering this is Reach the primary dockyards and the UNSCs main base, as well as that Reach is only 1 of the 6 planets in the Eridani system that have millions of people, and even that won't get much resources.

Also, every Spartan is a brainwashed superhuman child soldier. While the 3s didn't have an implant to reduce their sex drive, Spartans don't tend to socialise outside those they trained with. That's how close Mendez drove teamwork into their heads, I'd struggle to believe a 3 would talk to Rory, and considering these are superhumans that can survive falling from orbit, I doubt any would be worried about being raped. You quite clearly haven't read much of the books such as ghosts of onyx on the Spartan III program, these are people who before they were 6 watched the Covenant glass their homeworlds, slaughter their friends or families, take everything they had from them. Not a bunch of naive hormonal teenagers.

Actually to maybe save you time just go to your other version and put into google translate and then copy and paste each chapter into English and add them to this fic.

i love the story but this a problem.
female characters keeps on referring as a he or as a his not a she or her. if you can fix that that will be great.

I apologize for not writing in spanish as I am not in anyway fluent in it I just wanted to say you need to work on your pronouns as you call the different members of blue team the wrong pronouns a few times as Linda and Kelly are female and John and Frederick are male. Also when talking about the Master Chief you need to say 'Chief' instead of 'Boss' as in this situation 'Chief' is just short for his rank 'Master chief petty officer of the navy'. Acabo de ir al traductor de Google y me di cuenta de que 'boss' y 'chief' traducen a 'jefe', lo cual es bastante problemático. Gran historia hasta ahora y espero que mejore en el futuro. :D

I just noticed that even though you updated recently, the last update still says it was last month.

Response: Well now that its been cleared up I’m good with it.

I just imagine the thought of a group of super soldiers walking alongside a group of fantasy looking teens into a McDonald's. I keep cracking up at the thought of the reactions of the employees and anyone else there. I love it!

when is this taking place?

Last one, forgot about this one. Emroy (You used n instead of m)

Ok so I’ll just say the basic corrections to the common misspelled words and names I see. Alnus (Name of the hill where the Gate is), Lelei (There are no Rs), Piña (There is no Y as its a Spanish word).

Hey like the story but really need to work on the grammar. Highly suggest you get some beta readers to proofread your story to improve it. Just friendly suggestion.

Serious need a beta, the grammer and spelling is too confusing if you are trying to translate it, you keep mentioning the women as 'he' when should've been 'she'!

you need a beta

i suggest getting a beta