1. chapter, the beginning, Plot twist:she just was on her period.

Very good chapter, i hope you update another soon!

wow.

Hope you continue this

Ok no romance

Ooooohhhh! I live for this! I love it! Please con tin!

J'ai hâte de lire la suite ! J'adore ton histoire !

Great Chapter!

I applaud the presentation here. And nobody can say shit for Rocci going to town on these bastards to instant kills. Doffy may not have done it, but I can EASILY imagine how slaughteriffic it would’ve been. And yes, that made up word is the only thing I can think to describe that carnage.

Doflamingo Is going to like this.

Maybe law x oc?

I am all for Renata looking like her grandma, she need all the help she can with General Ripper Akainu knowing her existence and whatever else the world might throw at her. She could even have a motherly aura around her, since she'll probably be more caring/authoritative to anyone her age since she is mentally older.
Also damn Dofla is gonna flip a table when he finds out.

I stated it to match genetic rules. I mean, look at Ace, he kind of looks like both his parents but with his Mom’s complexion honestly. And I dare ANYONE to look at Garp and Luffy and NOT see the resemblance. Grandparent looks showing up more in grandkids does happen. Hair color might be different, but the face as she goes could line up to make the connection.

And yes, Doffy is going to go on a town wide hunt for all members of that group, and the close family within it. Full sale slaughter.

This is so cute! Those kidnappers are sooo lucky that Roci got there before she could find Doffy. I’m really interested in seeing an indulgent Uncle Doffy spoil his niece...except I just imagined him doing things like cutting off someone’s wrist cause Rena liked their bracelet...sigh, oh Doffy.

Hi Shuichi Akai,
Before i start the review, let me say here quickly that i like to make my reviews in topics so i can separate and organize better the thoughts i had during the story, hope you don't mind. Also, everything i write in my reviews are always just my thoughts when i read the chapter, so i will never say something like "you did it wrong! you should have did that!" or things like that, it is yours story and i respect that. Maybe i will say that i don't think that thing A work very well or sometimes make suggestions, but i know that this is yours story, so i will never order you around or things like that, so if ever looks like that, i am sorry, it isn't the intention.

- Writting: I liked your writting, but there one thing that i find strange, that is how fast the situations comes and goes. Like, Sakazuki appears, "so you have a brat, she will be just like your brother" they almost exchange blows, Sakazuki goes away; Doflamingo appears, "are you Roci?" "Renata is hungry", "do you want pudding?", "IS IT A DEVIL FRUIT?!" they go away; Renata wakes up, "daddy, i am a bird horse!", goes to Doffy, "she is a bird horse!", "have you tried think you are human?", "daddy, i am not bird horse!" "and all is well when it ends well". What i am trying to say is, while is fun to read, it feels (to me at least, i can't talk for everybody) that things happens to suddenly and are resolved to fast.

- "My brother shot me...and i fel of the cliff": Tragic...and i kind of think we could use a little more information about how that happenned. I mean, we don't NEED to know, but now that we know that bit, i now kind of want to know a bit of background on how things got there. It seems interesting.

- "I don't plan on having Renata be in a pairing": I'm fine with that. I have nothing against pairings, but sometimes i have the feeling that people don't use it very well. I mean, they pick a character that they/the fanbase/readers particulary like and put them and the MC together just because of that. I get that is a fanfic and they write just for fun, and i respect that, but sometimes it hurts the more story-focus fanfics due, for example, the characters don't combine or don't feel right together or have nothing that could make one belive they would be together but because they are fan favorites they have to be the pair of the new character (even if the character didn't need a pair) and now the story has to continue with that. (for example, let's say, "Renata x Law, because Law is cool and they both like Corazon, so they should be together! Or Zoro! Because!") I'm not saying that pairings can't work or people shouldn't do it, just that people could do it based on whose characters already interacted in the story and judging by their previous interactions if they would feel right and beliveble being together. (i manage to explain well what i meant? That questions sounds dumb, since if you understood something other, how would you know what i meant?) So while i wouldn't have nothing against Renata having a pair, i am fine with her not having a previous choosen pair that maybe wouldn't work when it finally happen. (Not that i am saying you couldn't make it work, i never readed your others stories to know it)

- Doffy and Roci: I realy looking foward to the relationship between these two, since now Corazon have to act like a Doquixote Pirate and be a good father to Renata, so that cover of mute child hating Corazon that keeps to him self maybe wouldn't work very well, since Doffy already knows that he can talk and have conversations with him and Doffy would want to spend sometime with his brother and niece, so Corazon would have to interact more with him other than write something in a paper to him and goes to whereever to read the news or something, also, because Renata is there and would he acts with her, the tought character that he tries to do and prove by throwing children throught windows and et cetera maybe wouldn't convince.

- "He never wants to let Ren leave his sight now since he knows that devil fruits users sell for a high price": I kinda of want to this to happen. Something ike, for example, they passing throught Sabaody Archipelago and some slave traders capture her somehow and the Doquixote Pirates and Corazon raise hell in there until find her and the people that had taken her. That could even work to bring closer this little dear family of theirs.

- Devil Pudding: I am ok with how Renata ate her devil fruit, since i can imagine something like that happening, but i found funny her reation to eat it, like "this fruit taste weird- Oh my god must be a devil fruit, i am a devil fruit user now!" (i can be remembering it wrong, but in my head it was like that) As readers we woud know/suspect that it would be a devil fruit, but to someone that is in just another day eating some fruit, that wouldn't be a bit of a stretch for a first guess? I not saying that it was a problem for the chapter or anything, just that i laught a little at her suddenly going "devil fruit!" after eating a random thing. (even if she was probably right)

I think that's everything, thank you for reading my thoughts. I will be waiting for next chapter.

Until next time,
Heitor