I am just...In awe of this fresh take on He-man. I love it. I don't know if you plan to continue past this point but I hope you do. The emotions, characters and lore in this is so good.

oh shit
How can you leave it there? He-man? Amazing
please continue

The descriptions at the begining was nothing short of beautiful-You really let us soak into that enviroment, and it contains some of the best descriptions of Eternia that I have ever read, and let me tell you, I have read a very decent amount of He-man fanfiction. Your Eternia BREATHES. It's diverse, wild, but it's also home.
It always amazes me how you're able to balance very intense, detailed desctiptions with descriptive shorthand-Like how one one paragraph you're describing Eternia in intense detail, then the next you simply say that Duncan's story resembled the Fast and Furious movies. In both cases, it works wonderfully.
Additionally, this is one of the few stories that really dwells on the fact that Adam is half-alien, or treats Eternians as aliens at all. I also always laugh at the little Earth details you throw in, like the Game of Thrones movie being SIX HOURS long...Lol. Also Duncan and his many 'children'.
This story is one of the most fun and exciting ones in the fandom. I love it!

good chapter By the way, when are you going to update your star wars fic?

Voltron crossover? Shared universe? You know what, that's pretty badass. It works well with the story you've set up of this future earth. I haven't seen much Voltron, but I'm assuming this takes place before the events of the show?

your descriptions are beautiful, I am able to picure what you’re describing in my mind’s eye. It’s like watching a movie. Also, your writing always manages to make me laugh. Like the little detail about the president being a freind of Marlena’s? On first name basis? lol!
I also like how Adam always remembers to protect Cringer. It’s little details like that that make the story breathe.

This fic is great

Mal posso esperar para ler mais, gostei muito da ideia! Agora minha pergunta, para onde será que Marlena foi levada. Pelo que li, deu a entender que os capangas de Skeletor a pegaram. Eles a levaram para Eternia?

Okay...when the hell did this become a "Voltron" crossover?

Awesome, you write whatever you want and that makes this really fun and unique.

I really enjoyed this - and I can't wait to see where it goes next! Particularly meeting Marlena.

Someone’s in troooouuubbleeee!

For real though, I am so releived Marlena is here, maybe she can sort this all out, because wow, this is one crazy situation they’re in right now. They kidnapped the PRESIDENT. If Adam had just called her at the beginning, they might not be in this situation.

What I find really interesting and complex is your portrayal of Teela as a darker character. Like, she was straight out about to SMACK Orko, which is, wow. She’s clearly under INSANE stress right now, but that’s not an excuse. Duncan really needs to step in and explain to her how that’s not remotely in the realm of okay.

Speaking of Duncan, how is he not stressed as heck? He’s being sheperded around by a squad of panicking teenagers (including his only daughter and the prince of his planet) and an equally panicking trauma victim, who is like, going up against the VERY PEOPLE who tortured him, plus they’re carrying around the key to who’s going to win the war? How is he remaining so calm. The man must have a spine of steel, and for this reason I am more scared of him than of Teela.

Speaking of which, Orko’s really being put through the wringer here. YES, he should not have ran off and made a portal without permission, and he shouldn’t have lied about being able to get back, but WOW is he having a bad time. I hope he gets some positive attention after all this is through, because yikes.

I LOVE the story, as you know, but if I had one complaint it’s that sometimes the paragraphs are long, and a lot of people are talking, so it’s hard to tell who’s saying who. A writing tip I learned is that, every time a different character speaks, or the ‘camera’ switches to looking at someone else, start a new paragraph.

PS- I love how Cringer will not be separated from Adam, even if this means learning to work elevators. Good cat.

Jesus CHRIST, Teela! Take a fucking chill pill!

I love how you waste no time in establishing what is truely important to know about our cast: Who is pro or con pinapple on pizza.
Teela is such an edgy teenager. Like, the edgiest of all teenagers, she is peak edge, and I love it, because this is what Teela would be like if she grew up in the situation you described. Adam has such keen emotional awareness, (as seen very often in his inner monolouge, like how he politely corrects himself when he thought the guard was a man rather than a woman) while Teela is reckless and blunt. If they became friends, they would really grow and learn from one another.

Oh my gosh, Teela’s bulletproof.

That is awesome.

I’m laughing over how they woke up Duncan, that’s just hillarious. It shows depth to the characters that one moment it’s all about the revolution, the struggles they’ve faced, and then in this scene they’re basically doing a comedy bit. Love it. Love how it’s immediately followed by this really bittersweet moment where Teela reveals Duncan’s her father, and you can tell Duncan would rather Teela be safe than himself be rescued.

Oh Teela. She deserves all the pizza and soda in the universe. Adam and Orko just seem to instantly click with one another.

Gotta love how you are constantly having fun with this being set in a future Earth. The world is crazy and unpredictable, and you go full on with it and throw whatever you want out there. Love it.

“Don’t freak out, I brought pizza!” Excellent line. The transition to prince shouldn’t be that hard, Adam’s already an expert diplomat.

The earth team (Jasmine, Roger, ect.) are such good guys…Deserve the best in life. I hope they don’t go to jail for all of this, lol.

I’m so sad over Orko, he’s so sweet…And Teela’s clearly angry because she cares so much about her people…Gosh this is good, this is good emotional conflict, I love it. You are really good at emotional conflict, okay? like. REALLY good. I wonder if this was intentional on Skeletor’s part, that he used Orko to get to Adam…Wow. Again, I really love this, okay? The emotions, setting, everything, it's fantastic.