Kotoamatsukami*

honestly the grammar is pretty bad no offense but yeah

This is just a shitty version of lemon games.

Was it really necessary for him to rape two women, Naruto is a protagonist, not the antagonist.

I mean i could understand if it was a plot device, but there's no plot in this story, it's obviously just smat so it's not necessary, so why? Even then you still don't have a protagonist rape someone.

Que buena historia estare al pendiente del proximo y una sugerencia porque no metes a las chicas de Highschool of the Dead sería un desperdicio si no lo hicieras

Why does Naruto have two summoning? I hope it gets explain later on in the story.

dude your a copycat and you barely know English and its grammar I would find a different hobby b4 you get sued.

You don't put lemon scene as much as you put which girl getting in ... just take it slowly with adding girls

Nice one

the clone sex is such a turn off, they are different version of naruto not the same in any way even though he created them. in a fanfic the fact that one naruto cant satisfy females is just.. really...

What a mess of a story. You try to do too much.

What a messed up story. At least in the lemon games it was more believable than this.

Also no to clone use during sex except for those into gangbangs which I'm not.

Since I glanced at the next chapter figuring that was next after this ones clone showed up..

I'm done here.

So he beat a restrained woman unconcious and then goes to rape her when she wakes. Having the bright idea to go for oral first and the enemy kunoichi who should be royally pissed didnt bite his dick off I assume so she wouldnt be stuck there.

However with little effort gets released and still does nothing?

This naruto is... unpleasant and the story is bad. Also why is snow before wave. Hes too weak for the snow mission. Finally this rainbow chakra stuff..?

Not worth reading, not even as smut.

In sorry but this wasnt any good. The chapter is mostly a series of descriptions rather than a story. Basically telling what you saw on TV in a sense rather than watching and hearing the events and dialogue take place.

Making ayame an easy girl who's slept around a bunch and is an easy lay personally annoyed me. That he would skip out on more sex made no sense. For him to pass so he could read it quicker. I feeling it would be one of those where the sex is over the second the guy cums just once aside from oral or anal.

Then came the mizuki part which was rushed garbage at the end.