Wow that was refreshing! What a horrible way to die! It was so angsty and depressing. I liked it! Thanks for your hard work!

Wow. You know, I usually try to avoid super dark fics but this one is just phenomenal. It's insanely well done. You did an amazing job at capturing Kyo and Iori's feelings on being trapped together. Their reactions and personalities never seemed forced or out of place and despite the sad ending I genuinely enjoyed this. The part where Iori started to lose his vision... Man, that had even me feeling freaked out. Great job capturing the fear there. This and its sister fic is excellent. I hope you decide to write more in the future.

Hey! Finally trying this out :)

This is a fascinating story. And I really like...MOST of it ; You nailed the cold AI perspective you were looking for; even Kyo and Iori's emotions were filtered through what it could and couldn't figure out. (The expressive dialogue showed them off pretty good too, though :) The first half was really well paced - it just FLEW by - and the tragic twist of Phase 3 was shocking and powerful. Iori's version of a breakdown was distressing as hell, and just thinking about having that happen to you... *shudder*

All I really didn't like about the story was the ending. Just when you're most curious about who the hell's behind this and what the hell the AI will do next...it kills them. And we don't even learn WHY, much less who made it :( The Notes make it sound like this was a dream-transcript sort of thing, which would explain it (dreams almost never have good endings...). Either way, though, the ending still felt a bit flat, which hurt the story as a whole.

You've definitely got me intrigued, though. You told an interesting story here, and you used great writing to do it. I'll definitely come back for more of your stuff soon, starting with Broken of course. (...even though it sounds super super painful ;_; )

Thanks for the read! Here's hoping I can come back soon :)

TT

You keep killing them. My poor babies. I thought I was cruel to them, your worse. I was waiting for them to find an escape route, but they didn't. The soulless AI won. Some stupid organization got what they wanted from them, and just disposed of them like trash. At least they could've had their last fight before Yag went blind :(.

Btw, Watching Yag go blind was heartbreaking. Especially since it the AI was just literally destroying how eyes. Kyo trying to comfort him was sweet, but the situation sucked so so bad. He goes "look at me", and iori's just can't see anymore. :(

Kyo didn't have time to appreciate his nervous system failure before AI axed him. I'm happy for him. At least Iori didn't die alone, Kyo actually did. :( If only Kusanagi clan arrived a bit earlier... You could've have done that, right?! Ugh.

Then again, what's Yag gonna do blind? Or Kyo w/o nerves.

Also, any reason for iori's flames being orange? Like, is he less cursed when he's scared or 'not hating kyo'. I seriously need some happy stuff now. Like I dunno, goofy happy stuff between these two. :(

Good job Rin, but pls. My heart