Update soon

THIS IS a good Story
Pls continue

Your story already has brownie points since the romantic interest is Albedo lol (yeah I'm all for her) - while it already has distinctive 'harem' tones which I don't particularly like I guess I have to be content that she at least is the first since it's a mind boggling mystery why this fandom have so little in terms of MC/Albedo fics whether that's Momonga or an OC.
Hope you find the inspiration to continue this ;)

it's a shame this is a one shot. it is really well done and I would love to read more.

Really sad this is a one shot. I fucking love this story. You did great! It's actually fucking amazing...

Great keep it up

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so continue or one shot ?

This is in my opinion an excellent start. It’s the basic Overlord fanfic intro but I really like your OC. It’s refreshing to see that he just says screw it and just rolls with all the NPCs throwing themselves at him, so I’m kinda expecting a harem of at least Albedo and Shaltear but the way you described Aura and Mare I’m expecting that no NPC will be “safe”. Also I found the scene with Albedo very entertaining, you know a man is a great leader when he can effectively rule with a horny woman’s lips around his cock. Great job and I look foward to future updates.

You must continue this beauity!

I liked the one-shot!

if you are able in the future, write a one-shot about meeting evileye(it may not need to be a lemon). i sure he will sense her vampirc nature.

I like it there really aren‘t enough overlord lemons

Was kinda confused with the title as ancient one was one of the guild members.

Although the grammar needs a bit more work. The story is good overall