Like the pacing compared to the last story.

Schwartz should find the Warners. And that person should kill Salazar. Buuuuuut we know how it ends. Or do we?

update is so good you dont find this kind of storys often!

Really interesting mood change here.

I'm curious to see if we'll find out more history surrounding the King's family and Salazar with the guards. It seemed a little to me that the King never got

As always, work on your pacing and dialogue.

Also be careful on giving away hints in the author's note. You don't want to accidentally give away what happens next. Surprise us if you can.

And sh!t hits the fan.

The Warner three is left.

First off, Merry late Christmas! Im surprised I took this long to get back with the story.

I do like that your being consistent in keeping the slow pace of story. I also like that Salazar has personal relationship with the Warner family that steadily deteriorating over time. Im curious

Definitely keep working on that dialogue though. The Warners sound okay but everyone else tends sound the same.
Also, make sure to keep track of certain things you already said in the chapter to avoid repeating yourself within the same chapter. And if you have to recap something, make sure its brief and quick.
It's nice! Keep Going!

I see the story is different.

Also, are the ages right?

ah,Dot's next.
well then,she'll be hogging all of the attention because she's cute

oooooo
I love it so far.
but if Scratchy and the Nurse knew the Warners were royals why didn't they say anything in the movie?
did they forget?
or not recognise them?

.I like the slow pace.

Some of your wording needs to be adjusted. It can be misleading. Like for example she was in labor for 10 months. I think you mean she was pregnant for 10 months.

Wow! This a. major improvement over the last one! I can definitely tell you took your time with this rewrite

The pacing is a lot better, there is a lot more description, and the dialoguewhile a little stilted and wonky at times) feels a lot more natural.

One thing, I think you meant to say "a few years later,rather than a few "months" since you made it clear Yakko is old enough to talk now.

Nice start! Curious to read more!

It's nice to see you come back to this after all this time. Hopefully, Yakko doesn't die in this one (he probably will and I'll probably/most likely cry)