A good fanfiction.

The only criticism I have for the commercial (not the actual fanfiction, the fanfiction was good) is that it really paints IF in a slightly negative light at the start, I'm fairly sure that IF actually learnt all of that by herself but the commercial made it out that she was taught by the guild master. Of course, this does not affect the actual fanfiction, its just that if I was in IF's shoes, I might be a bit annoyed having to show myself as somewhat weak.

Good work and thanks for the oneshot.

I have to admit, this was quite good Congrats on a really well done FF ;)

I can't say much more...'Cept... Make more! I wanna read more! ;D

~Archaeologist of Humanity

Wow, for your first story in FF, you did really good.
I almost think you'll gonna do a parody of a real commercial, but no. Its a unique one...

Good job. I like it.

Anyway, keep on writing boy.
And one more thing
"Planeptune... wants YOU"

Join the fun, be a Planeptunian. Progress... is our life.

- Alex

That was pretty good