Good new chapter!

Cute so far!

Very nice stuff for a first fanfic! Keep up good work

Another great chapter!

Hello guys welcome to Fanfic Nation, I’m your host AB13 and let’s get riiiiiiiiiiiight to the review!
(For simplicity sake whenever I’m asking a question about a scene that confuses me and I have to compare to the game I’ll refer to the main character in the game as Joker)

So first of all in the introduction, we get confirmation that Bradley is a hard worker who had to work low paying jobs in order to provide.
“Bradley figured Futaba must have extracted the money to buy the PC case” First of all thank god Bradley isn’t dumb, secondly there’s a bit of an oopsy here.
You treat 3,000 yen as a lot of money which Bradley had to grind for, however, 1 shift of any job in the game easily makes it to 3,000 yen easily. Even the convenience store pays Joker 2,800 yen per shift.
I’m not sure if your away of the differences in our cultural money but 3,000 yen is not paying for a PC case. Just google PC case on Amazon and an average one costs about $200. If we convert USD to Yen than that means $200 will turn into about 20,000 yen.
The trick is that yen is labeled with 2 additional 0’s (In a nutshell)
Moving on from inaccurate price ranges, Futaba getting insecure about Bradley’s trust is a nice touch. Now let me tell you why I love small moments like this, when a series pays attention to continuity and their setting and characters are directly affected by events, it shows the author is willing to put in the extra effort to fully flesh out their world. It’s such a shame some real-life authors write while ignoring small details. Now this small detail is stellar because it relates to Futaba’s past as a vigilante hacker and joining the Phantom Thieves. Old habits die hard since Futaba is used to invading other people’s privacy [I may be drunk and remember things wrong but didn’t Futaba say that she could hack into a Russian bank or something (I vaguely remember something about banks)?] , and as a teenager she must have not thought much about the morality of invading users personal privacy, only to throw criminals into jail. She got so used to it she didn’t even think to ask before getting money out of Bradley’s account. On the other hand the other hand it shows how she’s trying to move on from that past and become a Phantom Thief of justice. Plus it also emphasizes that she thought she could only fit into Joker’s social group of friends if she became a Phantom Thief.
Small moment, but I like it. Keep it up with these.
“The Graphics Card! In case you don’t know that is, it gives a visual image to the monitor.”
*Pushes up glassess*
Actually a graphics card is a printed circuit board that controls the output to a display screen neeeeeeerd.
Now then add another 20,000 yen to buy to the graphics card and we’re good to go.

“You are welcome and thank you to Bradley. I really do appreciate your help. You’re an awesome friend, maybe even more…”

Aaaah Futaba being an awkward dork is always nice. But just a quick edit for the last line to fit Futaba more.

“I love your help, it’s why I like you…”
Bradley raised an eyebrow. After a moment Futaba processed her sentence. A blush bloomed on her cheeks. “Uuuuh...nothing! Ididn’tmeamitlikethat! IIII’m just SAYING we’re great friends and all AND I uuh reeeally appreciate your company! Hehehehe…”

And the next line is especially adorable.
“Dang it...he’s so cute.”
Just remove the ‘so’ since it’s unnecessary.
“Over the past couple of weeks Bradley had been working hard, earning yen and continuously going back to Futaba ordering part after part until one day, they were finally ready to put it all together.”
This is nearly the except same paragraph as the first. Now it’s a bit confusing here, did Bradley spend a few weeks earning money, buy the PC case, then spent the next few weeks earning more money and then buying the materials needed?

All right then, the next scene Futaba brings rubber gloves. Now I would commend the characters for being smart but I actually did a little research online. Turns out rubber gloves just increase the chanes of an electrical discharge and the electricity could just hit the skin above the glove. The correct gloves (from my research) is actually latex or nitrile. I’ve also found out that anti-static wristbands exist so if you want extra safety you can get that. The more you know.

Bradely helping Futaba with the PC is nice. He is a gentleman thief after all.

“If only Mom were her to see this...she would be proud. I’ve made great friends and achieved awesome things like this. I know she would be proud.”
Error on the wording here, here’s the proper way:
“If only mom were here...I know, she would be proud.”

The cuddling scene is adorable.

It’s also nice to see the trust of Sojiro and Bradley. Although I’m a bit surprised Sojiro didn’t give him a dad talk with a good old slap on the back.

“Pain~pain~fly far away~”

Dammit man you're giving me cavities.

Although I remember seeing this expression from a Shufuta comic when Joker just gets out of interrogation and Futaba is comforting him. Did you get it from there? If so, you have good taste mate.
So how was Bradley position when he was sleeping? Was he lying down, or sitting up right like an anime character that’s too cool for school? Because having your hand constantly holding onto someone elses for 8 hours straight is exhausting. This isn’t a critic, just a question.

The last scene is (insert synonym for adorable here). Especially Futaba taking advantage of Bradley’s lap.

All right then, ending scene is Bradley confirming he has feelings for Futaba. Amazing, surprisingly it felt natural, good job. Can't wait to see where this questline leads to.

Cool!I like it

Allright ProtagxFutaba leeeeeets go!
The name change I don't mind, I'm actually surprised that there's not 5000 self insert Persona 5 fics replacing our boi Ren.
The beginning is a bit confusing. Sojiro apparently trusted Brad to know about Futaba before the change of heart? It sort of creates conflict with the fact the protagonist has to prove himself to Sojiro and the negative consequences of false charges in Japan (IDK if in Japan it's worse to get falsely accuse since our political environment in the west is such a goddamn mess).
Since Sojiro saw himself in the protag and Wakaba in Futaba, (semi-headcanon) he didn't want to risk them falling in love.
Now your grammar could use a bit of work here:
"Bradley had improved well on his friendship with Futaba since they met and Futaba had started getting used to the outside world one step at a time. Today he decided to hang out with her at Inokashira Park as a different change of pace, oppose to when they had went to the electronic store in Akihabara. So the afternoon Bradley decided to do some fun activities and then he decided to work in the evening."
This can be changed to:
"Slowly, Futaba was getting used to the outside world. With each step she takes, Bradley felt their bond grow stronger. However, Bradley decided that Futaba needed a different environment. One without games and technology encompassing her. Therefore the most logical place was a place without technology, more specifically a park, Inokashira Park."
My writing style is bit more complex (cause I love to flex) but just take away a few words and you would get a simplified paragraph.
"As they were on the train, there were a lot of people as usual. Futaba, still a little nervous of social interaction, sat close to Bradley. He noticed her change in mood, and he slowly put his arm around Futaba, hoping to give her a bit of safety comfort"
Aaaaaw this is adorable ︎ These moments are nice
Hope this updates soon

Hey! Great job for your first fanfic! Hope to see more soon :D

Good stuff.