Yeah, I was wondering how you managed to write such a long fic in less than a week :P This looks like you put a lot of effort into it. I checked your profile, but there's not much else to it. Have you written any other works?

Hey,
I really like your idea, gut I have to say that it's Hard to read your story. You should describe what happens a little more and make it clear when you change the POV, maybe just by letting some space between the paragraphs

Hello! I am really interested in this dtory, but sadly it is practically unreadable. I think part of the problem is that you sometimes forgot to put a space after the period, and when that happens in a place where the word after the period is two or three letters, ffnet assumes it is an url and deletes it. You could fix that by adding a space after periods and replacing the chapter. Or have you uploaded this story to ao3 or another site?
Thanks!

OMG I CAN'T YOUR STORY IS AMAZING!
NO MAGICAL!
I LOVE IT AND I WISH THERE IS MORE GRINDELDORE MOMENTS IN IT!
CAN YOU PLEASE WRITE ONE?,YOU MUST!