Owhh yeah
One little thing..
Your story sucks

So disgusting..
This type of danny's character is pathetic for me
So iam out!

KAWAII! SO CUUUUUTE! Great story. Truly.

I some how find this entire situation SO hilarious!

adding a gender bent dash into it really fucking ruined it for me.

Gross.

Did not expect that to happen to dash but great story

Noice

Does the heart next to kitty's name mean pregnancy or established relationship

ugh, sorry but dash is human excrement. not much you can do to redeem Sam from this. cheating or not, whatever. It was too much. And the last thing I ever wanna read is Dash having sex with anyone.

You don't have to tell people to stop reading it if they don't like it. They'll stop reading it if they don't like it on their own. Adding "don't like it? don't read it" to your summary just screams insecurity and disrespect. It's like "don't like having your writing judged? keep it to yourself." You don't own this site and people can do whatever they can here. That includes reading your work just to not like it.

Hey Hey HEY!
Whta about my man Tucker?

Damn the story was really interesting up till the genderbending. Just not my thing

This story felt a little lackluster. It was your usual trope- harem, smut, kinks thrown in but felt off, the couples were a little rushed and I will admit the extremely drawn out situation with Sam was upsetting and heavily distracting. I will not harp on how you should not have written it, or even how it was heavily out of character for Sam, as you explained (finally) about Dash's super power. However the entire situation was distracting because it came out of left field, it split up Danny and Sam who are a cannon couple, a fan favorite couple and who are obviously very much in love in the show. I know you made your argument that it was ntr, but that was disingenuous, as ntr as a genre does not only include married, or dating couples. It often includes situations where a couple has emotions for one another but it is unspoken, or they are falling in love only to have the villain swoop in and take the girl's affection, and often her mind in the process. It is not my cup of tee but if you are going to include ntr, don't try to hide behind the thinly veiled "they are not a couple yet" argument. And be careful as well with your warnings-with the mind power's Dash possesses he was raping Sam and while i know you tried to argue that one away it is un-controvertible. However all that aside as I said the biggest issue with the Sam situation is that it was a prominent plot point that was drawn out for too long and in a piece that is basically smut and sex scenes that is a problem. Your writing skill is good enough that the non sex moments are engaging and well put together which means I was torn with the emotions for Danny and Sam and so I didn't really care that he was having sex with so many beautiful women. I basically rushed through the story to watch Sam and Danny finally get justice and have her not be a mind controlled rape victim. Your writing is so good I think you could have definitely had that plot point resolved easier and earlier allowing the reader to enjoy the background fluff that was the rest of the story. Positive points you write some decent sex scenes, have a great way with words and emotions when they show and I loved your final revenge on Dash! Although with how many women he probably mind-f&*ked I would have had him be left unhappy vs. just getting a spot in the harem.

good story i expect you come back and write more thanks for do this

You complained about people not using NTR properly but you're using Cucksd wrong