What’s with the exclamation marks after almost every quote?

Great fic. Would love to read what happened next?

Great story so far. I would like to know what happens next. I hope you will continue this very soon.

Oh no! Poor Dan!

Great! Your paragraphs tend to be a bit long which makes it harder to read online, so maybe think about making them shorter? Good writing though! Update soon please

I was starting to feel withdrawal so I’m so glad you updated! This was another great chapter, I definitely enjoy the Chloe and Lucifer parts so they always feel so short :( Cant wait to see what comes next! Would love to see Maze stay on earth and get with Ben but I’ll be eagerly awaiting the next update :)

I adore your story. Please, keep going. I am looking forward to know how it will develop.

Yea, love the return of Ben. He n Maze are awesome together. More!

Great story! I’m hooked! And I love that Ben Rivers just showed up! More please!

MORE! I am so in love with this story, it’s beautiful and perfect. Don’t listen to the haters because this is amazing :)

Lucifer is never mentioned in the Bible. The entire story of the devil and Lucifer comes from what is essentially a bible fanfic called "Paradise Lost".

You use way too many elipses, often in places they dont belong. Your paragraphs are also too long and effect the flow; I reccomend breaking it up whenever a new topic comes up and just more frequently in general around a natural break up point.

Each speaker should get a different paragraph to differentiate them; it makes the story flow better and makes reading easier.

I wonder now that Ben Rivers showed up, if Lucifer, Chloe or Linda can talk with Maze and convince her to stay on Earth. As Lucifer had pointed out, even when he didn't know she had acquired a soul, they had both been changed too much by living in Earth and among humans that going back to Hell would not be helping them.

And things seem to be looking up for Mads as well!

Definitely will be looking forward to more.

Loved it