Interesting Fic, hope you update this soon.

Good and enjoyable story. I hope you will continue it at some point. Also I honestly don't think there is any reason for re-writing the chapters you claimed to be unhappy with, unless some info in them would contradict a future chapter they are good the way they are.

Something I'm curious about - could Taylor ability to dump her emotions into her swarm make her invisible to the empathic sense used by Grimm?

As for "After the Fall" I share your opinion, it was underwhelming at best. In my opinion if you want to read about adventures of CFVY then fanfic "Winter Hunt - Spring Hunt - Summer Hunt" by Bookah (available on AoOO) is way better and more engaging, even if it's no longer canon compliant.

I’d be knocking some heads together if I was in Taylor’s shoes. She is way more patient with idiots than I would be.

Doormaker’s shard was exhausted completely, if I remember correctly. Cauldron (or anyone else) shouldn’t have access to any more of his portals.

Blake, reacting rationally to information regarding the White Fang? What next, a spherical cuboid?

Lol, this actually an amusing bit of fanon, or you can count it as an original idea for this story, it doesn’t really matter, but Taylor’s never actually made lasagna in canon, let alone her mom’s fabled recipe, which I also don’t think exists in canon.

There’s a few things that I forgot to mention in the previous review. When Taylor opens up to Blake on the rooftops, she mentions ruling a city. This should immediately have caught Balake’s attention, given the small size of Remnant. Even if Taylor had said ‘town’ in place of a city, an even on that scale would have been enough to trigger a world war in Remnant, if it weren’t for the Grimm. Blake simply disregarding that is a major hit of SoD.

Ozpin and Taylor/s interactions also seem somewhat off. Even if Taylor was rattled by the similarities between her and Ozpin, which I think is a stretch, she still would have harboured a grudge over it. Taylor is vindictive, and while she won’t actively seek to settle grudges, if in a position where harming her someone she bears a grudge to will benefit her, she will go at them viciously. She wouldn’t cooperate with them to the degree she did with Ozpin here, and her realisation wouldn’t have been enough to rattle her out of her dislike of him, which should only have increased in this chapter, especially given how the mission at Twin Seams played out, which I touched upon in my previous review. From Taylor’s perspective, he is a headmaster abusing his authority for whatever reason, a situation near identical to the one before her trigger, and this time there is not institutional justification or incentive for doing so, and humanity has held out against the Grimm for centuries remarkably well, unlike the Endbringers, which were estimated to fuck up civilisation in ~20 years, and kill off all of humanity in ~50. Neither is there a Scion level threat to justify such drastic actions.

Moreover, control is a big thing for Taylor. It’s something intrinsic to her character, with how stubborn she is and how her Master power manifests, and is consistent with behaviours of abuse survivors. She definitely wouldn’t be so cordial with Ozpin, after already having conveyed her hostility in some form and having no real reason to cooperate, given how she already has some semblance of a support system slowly slotting itself in place. This last point is bound to be a subjective, though, and it’s all in how it’s presented.

On Yang and Taylor’s interactions in this chapter: I see Yang as the easygoing sort of personality that can be friends with anyone, even if not being necessarily close. At least, if not friends, then she could at least get along with them. Plus, regularly trudging into life-threatening situations together has way of making people bond together even if they would have been sworn enemies if they;d met anywhere else, and Taylor should know this.

So, I was about to write a somewhat comprehensive review later on, but this seems to be a good point to do so as well. As for the reason I chose this, well, leaving aside whether Taylor was justified in her actions or not, what happened in the past few chapters wasn’t her fault. The one responsible for team composition for this mission was the Beacon faculty and they should know what the likely outcome would have been, given they are experienced huntsmen and teachers. Originally it would have been excusablenot justified, only excusablebecause it was purely a combat mission, but the moment lives were on the line, Goodwitch should have taken command. Taylor should know this, being a leader and all, but then again, she would also have attempted some form of resolution previously, either though strong-arming CRDL or through gentler means.

Now, onto some of the more general criticisms. I appreciate that this story is attempting to handle the fallout of Worm and Golden Morning on Taylor, something that a lot of stories don’t do nearly as well, or at all. It’s certainly better than anything I could write right now, but that doesn’t mean I don’t see problems with it. The pacing of the story is a bit off. Given how character driven this is, the downtime from the show doesn’t really transfer over well. In the show, character moments were peppered over a timeline of weeks, and that’s the case here too, except the conflict in the show was also introduced relatively recently in in-universe time. Here the conflict can be such that it realistically would have been resolved previously, though I can’t give examples right now as I’m writing this from the iPad app.

Certain characters also feel a little flanderised, like Yang. She seems to be her bad fanon self where she is presented as overprotective, impulsive and rash, ridiculously quick to anger and resort to violence, except not really. She’s not being bashed, though that one particular segment wouldn’t look out of place in a bashing fic. It’s not something that shows up elsewhere with her, either, just that one scene. It’s a problem with Taylor as well, though not immediately obvious. A lot of the nuance Wildbow had in his first person narration isn’t there, and while that’s a very high bar to clear and an unreasonable expectation, it’s something that will make Taylor feel off. Moreover, she isn’t a simplified version of herself either (simplified does not mean fladerised, different stories have different components) but neither does she then truly feel like properly like Taylor, such as the previously mentioned ‘conflict resolution’ with CRDL.

This is best summarised as an uncanny valley situation, where things are just good enough that they feel familiar while still having small but impactful flaws. That’s a theme with this fic. It has a very good premise, and the execution is good in the broad strokes, but it stumbles in the details. Don’t get me wrong, it isn’t bad by any means, but the kind of story this is trying to be means any flaws it has will be that much more noticeable.

It was beautiful

I am surprised that Ozpin hasn't compared her to Raven yet. Both of them are very similar : ruthless, paranoid, resourceful with an independent streak a mile wide.
A meeting between them will be interesting. They will either be greatest allies or greatest enemies.

Haven't seen this updated in awhile. Was really looking forward to more.

I see why you stoped writing after this, after the conversation with Ciara the story broke, and became like a parody of itself, it was realy enjoyable before that and became unnecessary angsty in my opinion. Thanks for the story.

I really enjoyed this story, it was just what I was looking for a few days ago: A post-GM cross over, and you did not disappoint. This has actually become one of my favourite Worm X-overs, and considering how many I've read, that's pretty impressive. You pulled of the characterization really well, each of them have their own problems and... Biases isn't quite the word I'm looking for, but maybe ways of looking at things, how they see situations differently, I guess.

... And I can't lie, I am extremely happy that you chose not to leave it on a cliffhanger or something before you took your break, that would have been cruel! Where you left it feels really good, like an end of an arc, the beginning of a 'New' Taylor and all.

I will be eagerly waiting for new chapters when you come back from you break, so until then!

I wonder how absolutely disappointed/depressed Taylor is going to be when she figures out that everything she has been slowly convincing herself doesn't exist on remnant the conspiracies and the threat of extinction by grim actually does exist. Because oh boy that's going to be a kick in the groin when it comes out.

Please update...