lol ino sucking him and memory whipping him after doing the deed. lmao.

good story
ok Ino is interesting
and I'm curious about Tenten

I hope you continue and i can’t wait to read more

I enjoyed this story, it has a lot of secrets but I guess we will discover them in time.
Its really cool that naruto is getting along so well with his girls :3 and ai am enjoying it to the max haha.

Wait what, I am congused, did ino really blow naruto or was he imagining it the whole time?

Lol naruto worked hus magic fingers on tayuya and made her putty on his hands only to end up broken and with a very jealous konan hehe :3 I like it.

Holly shit kabuto sure is an evil fucker, what could he have done to tayuya so she may betray naruto?
And now we got konan and ayame man naruto sure is charming all the beauties hehe, ohhh and tayuya got jealous :3

I have always liked these uncommon pairings, and this first chapter is the perfect example that even a relationship between two people you never thought would be together are way cuter than cannon pairings like sai and ino and so on.
And besides tayuya is quite the fiery redhead so seeing her all adorable and cute is just so awesome hehe :3 besides this story is harem so no problems with naruto charming girls left and right haha.

Because context matters blight, there is a reason english translated mangas and animes does it. It shows the attraction towards another character, be it be platonic or sarcastic or genuine attraction.

Damn salty aren't we blight23? It's his story, so the author should write as he/she sees fit. Go read another one if Japanese suffixes bother you.

Stop using Japanese suffixes in an English language story. Why!? Excatly why do you think that it is a good thing to use them? “Everyone else uses them,” is not a valid defense because everyone else is wrong too.

English speakers do not use Japanese Suffixes at all and if you heard someone use them in an English language conversation what would think? I’ll tell you what you would think. First thought, “why the hell is this person using Japanese Suffixes why speaking in English?” Second thought would be “is this person deranged or mentally retarded.” Final thought is “I’m not taking anything this person says seriously.” This doesn’t change when a person reads an English story using Japanese Suffixes.

This epidemic needs to stop. These stories aren’t translation they are actual English stories. Using these Japanese suffixes does not make you “woke” or “culturally sensitive” or whatever other bs reason you and all these other authors tell themselves. All you are doing is taking a concept that started as just using one or two Japanese words or suffixes just to sound cute to the most fanatical extremes that sound stupid.

Do you think a native Japanese speaker reading your story is going to be like “wow, I feel so honored that this person is using Japanese Suffixes in his fanfiction.” No! Their going to think what the hell is wrong with this person. I don’t expect to see English syntax and Suffixes in Japanese writings since that would sound stupid because Japanese speakers don’t use them when speaking in Japanese.

It’s common sense author and really sad because you have a very good story here with an interesting plot and story concept. You are able to write very good dialogue and have good plot and character development. Yet, you screw it all up by making it sound stupid because you added non English syntax and suffixes in an English language story. How can you not see this? I’m curious, why did you decide to use Japanese Suffixes? What was your reason?

Please continue

Awesome chapter. I enjoyed this! I wonder what Tobi was up to? And what’s with Naruto’s dreams? Hmm...

really loving this story...imo it's your best
tenten bits was confusing thou...are they lovers...did hey have sex...what pain did naruto cause her
i hope you explain all that stuf later...also more ino...ou have to expand on that master/slave kink of her lol

great chapter I enjoyed it looking forward to reading more

nice chapter i really want to know what happened to tenten now but will wait and see