This chapter was particularly confusing. How long was Sakura training for? Unless it was literally years then her close combat skills, even armed, should be a joke compared to Rin's years of training. Not to mention that a spear is a horrible weapon to try to fight at hand to hand range with. A skilled unarmed martial artist would mop the floor with even a decently skilled spear user the moment they get past the optimal spear range to begin in-fighting.

Wanted to like this but the flow of your writing is just off, I thought it was the first person point of view but it’s something else. So I’m sorry to say I’ll not be continuing to read this.

"...looked DOWN into the leaf canopy..."
He is upside down. Probably was right side up before he was turned into a Yozi, but since the Surrender, he is upside down with his roots growing into the sky.

sigh... now i remember why i stopped reading this a while back.

this is getting frustrating. shirous being such a tool by playing right into others hands, and now someone stole from him.

Would Sakura be able to recognize the effect of Torment as artificial (I think unnatural is a better word, since artificial implies it can also be reversed artificially [which I believe is not possible. While it would be possible to remake her Intimacy, she would have to do it either the old fashion way, or use magic to create a new one])?

Curious if his UBW is now tied to the Perfected Lotus. The focus on the mud (and things growing from it) brought that to mind.

I'm sorry what? Shirou not having learned of English?

Dude, Taiga is an English Teacher. Do you see her not being serious to teaching Shirou her subject even out of class? You have to understand that the Tiger does not make her cub not learn the thing she is proficient in.

Aaahhhh ok my second attempt to guess who she was:
The Lover Clad in a Raiment of Tears.
She has to be her!

I liked this chapter. Though the plural of committee is committees, committee is the singular otherwise you used it right.

What do you mean by charmed in Terrestrial Martial Arts?

Considering how there souls are twisted, I am unsure the Head Maid would even be able to conceive to sigh (especially if the Urge is to follow the commands of their GSP [which it sounds like it is]. For the Akuma, their Urge is everything. It is what provides joy, passion, and purpose to them. An Akuma without an Urge [meaning it has completed it] will use all their energy to get to their Yozi patron, or one of their souls, to reforge their souls with a new purpose [even though it is arguably one of the most painful experiences in Exalted]).

Aren't the Dragon Styles created by the Immaculate Order Celestial Styles, or am I mixing this up with those (the ones I am thinking about have the bonus effect of eliminating the OoA surcharge of other elements [although it adds a cost while learning it, to the Aspect Charms of the Dragonblood])?

Shouldn't her blood be average? Considering her current age, and her learning styles from her family (thus being part of a Dragonblood lineage, and not a Lost Egg, or bastard line), I would expect her blood to be 2 or 3 dots...although 2 could be called 'fairly thin.'

I would love to see the sheets of Shirou, Sakura and Rin, if posible
Also I like the idea of having a small summary of your OCs when they are introduced!
Can't wait to see how long can Shirou keep his Exalted nature a secret

I'm not sure if being a Fiend would protect Sakura from Orabilis. Its in his nature to hunt those who learn knowledge only the Yozi should have (according to himself). He doesn't hunt because a law was made. The law was made to 'justify' his hunting.
Is the Fiend only being punishable by ED homebrew, or is there a line that says that in canon (I cannot see Malfeas agreeing to it [or if he did, actually following through], thus my question)

So, I tried to read this story. In the end, I couldn't continue.
The grammar is really bad in places and the sentence structure is poor. Conversations are done poorly, and the line dividers! Ugh, they make each chapter a pain to even look at.
There are few descriptions, and you jump around a lot. Plus, the Exalted world feels bland, boring, and utterly insipid. I don't know this series. To make readers more interested, you should have explained a lot more about the setting to make us care for and understand it.
There's no passion in this story, and the characters all feel dull and barely even 2 dimensional.
I want to like it and read more, but I cannot.

Why didn't she use her magecraft? She could have killed them all in an instant!