Bring it back man it going great

just update when the next chapter comes out man

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dude now I understand the confusion, are you editing or something?

I always get a notification update yet nothing changed. Why?

did you edit something? cos i just got an update notification. Actually, i been getting those for a while so...

Actually regular humans can use magic too, so ling as they train in it... so I'm guessing this is an AU for convenience sake?

Hm... you made Merlin die at 312? that's pretty young, he should have lived for at least a few more centuries... so you made the lifespans of half breeds less? unless he died not of old age but something else? or like I inferred it's an AU for convenience sake...

Really? the MC could have finished him in one move... didn't he want to leave as quickly to go and fix The Sword? why would he take his time finishing the Fallen? what, you wanted to show some action? then you shouldn't have made him as strong...

Sigh, this little battle kinda out me off, I mean what? why would he drag the battle? is he trying to show off?

Damn, I'm writing this as I read- did you intentionally drag the fight out so that he doesn't kill him and give time for other to come? that's BS...

didn't you mentioned that Kokabiel was level 61 before? now it's 51?

WHAT? Twilight echo? where TF did it come from? wasn't the sword named Dathanna? Gid you have to make up your mind...

your story is good you just have to fix the inconsistencies...

Many people ignore this but, shouldn't the Lord of a character, it's species or the lore of its abilities become true too? Don't know what's the lore for Dragons in Yggdrasil, but they usually are said to be immune to magic, have insane defense, so shouldn't the characters that get isekaid with their character reflect that? like how Ainz got that emotion suppressor, it should be something similar, so when he got transported to DXD he should have also gotten the characteristics of his species, abilities or whatnot that he doesn't have but that the lore implies should have... meaning him not being focused on defense in the game shouldn't really matter in the DXD world ..

am I probably bullshitting? Yeah...

Isn't "World Devouring Dragon" better?

Really the same excuse as Momonga? why do authors have to use the "I wanted to hold/use/see this one last time" not that it's necessarily bad, it's just me getting tired of seeing the same thing, though as different iterations...

you skipped one second between59" and01"...

"His character mouth is moving" he shouldn't have known that .. since when they play in the game they still have their "face" they feel their mouth moving and making expression it just doesn't translate in the players characters... so that's a plot hole- he should have only noticed when he check a reflection or touch his face, I think

Also I think you over did it with the spells... couldn't he just use a Bind spell? he should at least know one... to capture the demons to question them just in case the boy didn't know anything, I mean plot armor would have him get what he wants but still...

Anyways overall besides the grammar, which I won't specify misspelling and whatnot because it's been like six months since you've updated, it was a good chapter...oh I won't specify which again but in some placing you repeat stuff, even if you word it differently, anyways, again, nice chapter!

God...that Thanos reference was so cringe...

Why? why the female NPC not in Harem? They should be the first women to get on with. This is a Harem fic so you COULD make Magnus NOT see them as children.

when are going to update

not important. son of a bitch !

Please Update! T-T

please update TT

THIS IS A GREAT NOVEL AND HOPE THAT THE NEXT CHAPTERS COMES OUT SOON