Ohhh shit I knew it I knew she was pregnant! Also great story,and keep up the good work:-) .

Wow the the main protagonists life is f*cked up.

OH ROCKIN' DUDE.

Is this robert Jordan supposed to be a parody of the writer Robert Jordan?

Dear Blaque Cell,

I find that your series is FREAKIN' AWESOME!

It's flawless so far, and is so much better than the actual comic, ASM. You take real world issues, like sex, teen pregnancy, and of course; drug dealing, and you mold them into this spectacular story that teen audiences can enjoy.

Tremendou Salutations,

Drake Jennings AKA Grimhawk

Bump up the rating. Thats what I would do. Just in case.

For a summary, it's rather disapointing. Ah I'm just pulling your leg. Nice job.

Just so you know, I was ready to curse your name and hate you for the rest of my life if you screwed up the "power and responsibility" thing. It's become such a cliche phrase since the movie, but you've used it well. Kudos on that. Also, I'm still loving the story. That's about it. Have a nice day.

. . . this is why I added this story to my favorites. Wow, very impressed. You effectively redefined "Blaque Cell'ed" (because "Ultimatized " is already taken) the Daredevil origin in one line when it would have taken other authors half a chapter. Your set-ups are effective, your character voices natural and distinct, and your prose is efficient.

The only critique I have in this latest chapter is that Daredevil's explanation to Rob on what's going on seems a little bit rushed, though I do understand you're trying to advance the plot as quickly as you can to make up for lost time in the action sequences. I also do notice that over the years that you've updated this story, Rob's voice has changed slightly - he's less noir-ish than when you first depicted him in the first ten chapters, and in this particular chapter I can almost hear Peter Parker's voice mesh in with Rob's dialogue. It's not bad at all, and if each chapter is taken in isolation, it is quite refreshing and clever. Reading through the entire series, however, Rob's change, to some people, can seem a little too sudden and may be noticeable enough to be jarring. (About less than a year has passed in Rob-time, is that correct?)

Once again, the critiques are very, very minor and I'm only critiquing because I absolutely love this series. Keep updating!

Man, if only the ACTUAL Ultimate Daredevil was this cool.

YAY for crossovers!

FINALLY! God, I thought you'd died or something! Thanks for updating; 'M still lovin' it. And if Tif isn't "just sick", I think I know what's goin' on. Can't wait fer more! Write on!

DAMN! You kick ass! Seriously, this is the best story I've read on for a LONG time! Keep up the good work!

I am a traditionalist. I like my Peter Parkers and usually avoid AU. Heck I rarely read crossovers.

BUT you are a fantastic writer. How else can you explain catching a reader and keeping them in a vice reading a genre they generally don't like?

I sure hope this is only a practice venue for you. You need to get thee to a publisher with a real book!

I really like this...narrated in the first person I felt I took a journey through the character's first years of life, saw the world through his eyes. Nicely done. Impressive is the jump in time from the present to the past. Characters and plotline believable until you get to the mad scientist. Little too incredible - could have polished it with more secrecy - seemed too out in the open and cheezy. Throughout nice descriptiveness and dialogue (personally I could have used a little less of the sweating and graphic sexual references for my taste). I won't review further chapters because I am not a Spidey reader...I took a walk from my usual fare - but you asked for constructive criticism and I will give it. Overall you are a talented writer who can get somewhere (and I don't say that lightly) but you need some polish. Do you read your own work with a critical eye? Do you step back and read it as if you did not write it? I think if you did these things the small faults would easily be exposed and corrected. Also, read your chapters to yourself out loud when you finish them - see if they flow or sound stilted. Good Luck.

That's sad...

~nayeli