Okay, I really do like the premise of the story. That being said, I can tell you are either a young writer, an inexperienced one or both. This is because you’ve made your OC a Mary Sue i.e a character you’ve tried too hard to make perfect and instead they become unrealistic, unlikeable and over-the-top. It’s a common mistake young/ inexperienced writers make, as they don’t realize flawed characters and imperfect characters are better received and understood by the audience.
Also, I get that Aura is a mom and mom’s are overprotective, but some of her dialogue and behavior is overkill. Edmund offered to hold her baby in the water and therefore prevent her from any harm eg drowning. Trust me when I say there was no need for that over the top threat of cutting him up. It makes the character seem very very cliche.
I appreciate the call to Indian culture, as I am Indian myself. I can’t quite tell if you are because an Indian would’ve probably written an Indian character instea white character wearing Indian’s clothes. But that’s up in the air and forgivable as culture and race don’t always line up.
I’m interested to see how this continues.

Love it

Love what has been written so far. Can’t wait for the rest

Good chapters of course