Thanks for updating!
And yes alfreds cookies ARE the best.

Dude this is some good stuff THANKS

Guess he'd pay money just to not have to listen to another lover spat.

I had to use Romanian? There's a better way. I get that Google translate is fun but think about it Spanish, English: they both end in ish but oddly enough not interchangeable. Actually the Rom language has East Indian, Persian and Armenian roots.

This reads more smoothly and doesn't require the reader to scroll to the end for translations.

Dick set the bouquet of flowers down and in Romani spoke, "I love you mom and dad..."

You can even italicize the translation to denote it as distinctly not English.

Okay, now that I'm done ranting, I'll admit I'm enjoying your story.

Aw, these are cute. I’m loving it.

The identity story needed more justification. Arty being annoyed and sunglasses being inconvenient doesn't seem enough. There were a lot of reasons for Dick to keep his secret. Batman ain't the sort of parent to accept but everybody else is doing it as an excuse and Batman's trust is hard won and hard kept.

I recommend reading Linchpin which is a top notch reveal story.

The writing flows well and is well edited.

The charity story is good. I like your descriptions on the drug effects. I like where you end your chapters a little cliffy and suspense is fun.

Great!

Pretty good.