This seemed like quite a nice story so far, I’m sad you don’t like it. Anyway, keep up the good work!

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I’d probably want Grace and Bendy to meet by Bendy doing a “morning patrol.” He does it every morning, and it’s always the same. Ink. Wood. Leaky pipes. Probably at least ten or more Searchers every time. Occasionally a member of the Butcher Gang or two. He likes to mess with the Pipers especially.
One morning, though, he’s just going through a totally normal morning patrol, and it’s the same as always, as I just said. Except, he hears a voice. A female voice. He looks up and sees a beautiful young woman, who isn’t made of ink, and isn’t black and white—but is still beautiful nonetheless. She looks kind of like Alice Angel, he has to admit. All of a sudden, Bendy becomes interested. He turns into his lovable-looking toon form, and walks up to the young lady. At first, she’s very scared of him, but then a group of Searchers appear, more hostile than usual, due to the presence of a human. Bendy protects her from the Searchers. Grace is thankful. Does she feel a sense of obligation? Yeah, definitely. So she agrees to stick along with Bendy, and they start to explore the studio together. YEE, DAT’S IT!

Also, nothing will ever beat the ship name “Grendy,” but get this: “Brace.”

I love it!

I think that you should combine a few chapters and modify some existing ones, but I personally think that restarting is unnessasary.
Possible ideas for Bendy and Grace to meet,
-She literally runs into him while fleeing from Sammy, he leads her to the safehouse, while at the same time, insulting Sammy's songs!
-She is trapped on Bertrum's ride and Bendy saves her by pressing an emergency stop button, and as they leave, he remembers what Bertrum was like before the curse.
Remember, "Adventure is out there"!

So, Bendy is thinking Grace is Angel? And he is getting possessive or obsessive(?) and I guess it makes sense. After all, he has been lonely for decades and his mental state is damaged.

hi! it's maianna. I'm using aguest account . I think allison angel should team up with grace to defeat beast bendy.

To be honest I love that you've made it longer sometimes I read stories and I always feel like I want more out of them like there could be so much more done and I feel like there's a lot of loose ends that need to be addressed don't get me wrong I love them all the same. But I feel like you want to make your story into something that is going to be satisfying for all the readers and I feel like you can do it. Personally I love longer ones as you then get to explore the dynamic between your characters more and establish their relationship. Either way it is completely up to you I'll read it regardless

I love long stories. I would prefer editing earlier chapters and then continuing. Keep what you deem important. And Bendy and Grace could meet while Grace is admiring one of the cutouts and Bendy gets curious as to why she stares at him like that.

I wouldn't worry about length too much: some stories are shorter, and some stories are longer. What's important is if the length is right for the story. For example, is the pacing right? I'd say yes. Do the subplots feel like natural extensions of the main conflict? Are the scenes being covered doing them justice? Again, I'd say yes to these both.

What you have here is a valuable learning opportunity that your fellow BATIM fans are enjoying, and I wish you luck in your revision efforts.

I liked what you had so far, as it didn’t seem like you were trying to rush things. Perhaps what you could do is merge some of the chapters together and smooth things out? They’re a bit short, but not bad.
As far as what I would like to see, it’s a “realistic” developing relationship. For example wouldn’t make any sense for Grace to be eager to jump into a new relationship so quickly if she’s feeling truly betrayed by her last one. The story you’ve told so far makes it obvious she is deeply hurt, and no one suffering that kind of pain would jump into the arms of someone else so quickly, even if they’re soul mates. She’d have trust issues no matter what, so Bendy needs to be taken a bit slow for her. She can, however, trust Bendy and sympathize with him as a person more quickly, maybe have an easier time opening up, but a romance shouldn’t spark immediately with her. She needs time to heal from whatever happened with her old boyfriend.
As for her not even knowing who Bendy is yet, it kinda makes sense for the story thus far. Yeah, she could know OF the cartoon, but the dark and twisted secrets of the studio WOULD be unknown to her. After all, Henry didn’t know until he got there and began playing their game.
My main advice is to take the relationship a bit slow. Nothing kills a good story faster than a relationship being unrealistically rushed.
One of the top scenes I’d like you to keep would be Bendy initially finding out she is in the studio. Where he was searching through the ink. I liked that whole interaction and it made Bendy seem to be a little less “monstrous” (he’s more misunderstood, but whatever) which can give him an advantage when he finally meets Henry’s family face to face.
But Grace’s main concern is finding her father and keeping her family safe right now. I’m interested to see how that will play out.
I’d also like to see Bendy taking some revenge on Grace’s ex, maybe in a way that would publicly humiliate the him, scar him, whatever. I don’t know what happened between him and Grace, but I hate him.
As for how they meet, there’s a number of ways that could happen. Bendy could rescue her from something else in the studio, she could stumble upon him, he could kidnap her, etc. Whatever you write will probably be good, given your past writings. Just please don’t try to rush things.
I can’t wait to read the improvised version!

What if instead of being pressured into updating multiple-part stories, you just do one-shots instead for a bigger series? That way you can keep track of the whole series and you can come back and revise as much as you want since you’re already plotting out each individual chapter.

Just a suggestion, though. I hope you have a great time enjoying and re-writing your series! You’ll do great, Joanie!

"Are there any events you want to see happen?" Bendy showing Grace that she has no reason to fear him. "How do you want Grace and Bendy to meet?" He finds her on his quest and well, kidnaps her in her sleep thinking he's saving her. "Any scenes you want me to keep?" Definitely the "Ink Abyss" scene.

PLEASE UPDATE!