This is nice.

I'm almost at the end of the chapter and I cannot continue because it is honestly unreadable.

I absolutely hate getting told the story instead of experiencing it as it unfolds. It's a right mess when characters just start blabbing that this happened, that happened, and then that person did this or that, it's a bad read and only serves to infuriate me.

Additionally your text editing program auto-corrects in such a way the text is full of spelling mistakes, showing me as the reader that you cared about it so little that you haven't even proofread it, lowering the value of the experience even more.

And finally telling the readers your opinions as a plot device for your story is terrible storytelling. If you want to establish that the Weasleys poisned Harry then show it in your story ffs, establish the scene the position of characters in it, and their agancy / feelings / motivations. If you don't then the product i.e the plot following such scene is a product of coincidence - it's unearned, it just makes me feel like I'm being robbed of a good story.

Good luck in the future and keep practicing as a writer, as there is potential there for good entertainment to be had.

I actually have an idea for a story that I could use this one in, it would included at least everything or almost everything from before Harry dies, and maybe some of what happened after the future was changed.

This has potential, but also doesn't make any sense. Lily and James apparently watched Harry throughout his life, but somehow Lily doesn't know that he dated Tonks and had sex with her but James knows...?

Cute! Love it

This is an excellent short. You could expand it, but it works as is. Great job!

Great short story

This was pretty cool. I concur with others that it was a tad rushed, but I still enjoyed it and would love to read a longer story with this storyline.

I like the idea behind the story, but it was very rushed and needs to be beta'd. Tonks was too young to have a teenaged son at this time and she believed the time travel story too easily. One potion doing all that magic is unreasonable. I can see Harry with Tonks. The age difference was less than that of Tonks and Remus. This can be a very good story.

Thank you for the satisfactory ending.

Please write the next chapter of hufflepuff's Metamorphmagi's. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

Fun chapter and quite a potion to cause so much change. Thanks for sharing!

nice story and if others will try to use it please let me know so I can read it

AHHHHHH FINISH IT! IF YOU DINT UPLOAD IN THE NEXT MONTH, IM GOING TO MESSAGE YOU SO I CAN PICK UP WHERE YOU LEFT OFF!

Omg I loved this. I hope you will add to it!