That was another great chapter, buddy.
Wow! 15.000 words! Not bad.
Looking forward to the following chapters, and the fight against both Babidi... and Majin Buu.

Fasha told Bulma all about them, ok so why did you repeat yourself here because two paragraphs before that fash already told Burma who they were

Im not sure i can read this :/
how does old king piccolo beat BOTH fasha and kakarot, kakarot who should be far stronger than in canon and fasha who should be over TEN TIMES stronger than kakarot, just going by canon power levels alone. here i could easily assume kakarots power level is easily around 1000, while canon it was around 260 and king piccolos was around 300, your numbers are off by insane degrees :( unless your simply making fasha a weak hoe when she arrived on earth with a power level around 100-150 but i dont see how when she travels to worlds with bardock who has a power level of around 10,000 (again canon) please google :/ i understand you dont want fasha and kakarot to steam roll through the story i guess but then you should choose a better premsie rather than crippling characters for unknown reasons o.O

you should google canon power levels so it doesnt look like your just choosing random numbers o.O King piccolo had a power level under 300 while tambourine had one of 340 most likely because of age. while canon goku had a power level of 260 and fasha before she died, 2000

well considering fasha should have a power level well over 2000 i find it difficult that she couldnt squash piccolo like a bug o.O

I don’t get why you went with the ‘feeling’ reason for her doing what she did when you literally have someone given psychic powers just a day or so ago. Why not have Bardock have her stay behind because he has the ‘feeling’, but he is not sure if it is real or some after effect from what that alien did to him.

That would have made Bardock’s power actually useful, and done away with the absurdity of why she remained behind.

Great story

Loved the chapter made!
That fat lady is really heartless to treat Suki like that, but I’m glad that she got what she deserved. The sexscene between Gine and Videl also was hot, despite it was short for them to enjoyWell done

Can't wait for chapter 41 and the majin buu saga!

So Fasha has a scouter - which means she should have been aware if she and Kakarot would have stood a chance against Piccolo. So why engage him if he was far stronger than them both?

Doesnt make any sense - given the behavior of everybody else with Scouter we have seen in canon - disengaging the moment you are faced with an opponent our of your league was standard modus operandi even for Saiajin ...

What is even more jarring - a scouter has an incredible range near Planetwide see Raditz how he found Piccolo and Goku ...
So for her not having checked how strong the guy coming their way is just dumb ... and there is no excuse why she wouldnt check that.

Then they both lost ... and even though Piccolo felt no pulse from both of them they miraculously survived the encounter because the plot demanded it ... that is just a really cheap way to return to the canon rails ...

and here I thought Fasha being on Earth and having trained and educated Goku would somehow make a noticeable difference ... apparently that was to much to hope for ...

So Fasha didnt think to use the Dragonballs for anything that might help her against Frieza after she learned about or you know have Bulma construct a gravity chamber in order to train Goku ... after all Vegeta had 10 times earth gravity ...

You wasted so much potential in a single rushed chapter it is not even funny ...

The Bojack Unbound chapter was very fantastic buddy! It was way much better than the actual movie, since it didn't include that dirty old pervert, Master Roshi or obnoxious pig, Oolong. Plus the changes you made to the chapter was very fantastic: having Maron cheering Krillin on even though he had no chance of winning the tournament and having Hercule honoring his promise to keep his Saiyan friends identities/alien origins a secret...even though he shared it with a reporter.

The fight scenes between Kakarot and his fellow Saiyans against Bojack and his crew were much better than what happened in the movie: as Gine and her friends had easy defeated Bido and Bujin without being paralyzed by their annoying psychic abilities. It was also great that you had Fasha and Kakarot finally awaken their Super Saiyan 2 powers and had the Saiyans combine their signature techniques to defeat Bojack!

Plus...the lemon scene with Yamcha and ChiChi at the end of the chapter was very hot and unexpected!

Now that was a fantastic chapter buddy! The slight changes to the Super Android 13 chapter were very unexpected as you added 18 and made 13's character's more sadistic and darker: as he harbored a great hatred towards 18 for killing his master/creator and wanted to make her suffer, besides than just wanting to kill Kakarot, his family, Piccolo and Vegeta.

It was both sweet, hot and exiting all at the same time. Looking forward to the Majin Buu chapters!

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