Awwww... I liked this story. Can you please put out a notice/chapter when it gets adopted?

I like this story, but I'm not too sure as to what was going on. Like why Bell is chased by deities or why he arrives to want to be an adventurer to not wanting to be an adventurer. If possible, I'd like to take a spin of typing something like this with your permission of course.

Can I take a look at your notes? I'd like to get an idea for what you had planned before I decide, for sure.

I am interested, though.

nice

Nice, though is it possible to ask for longer chapters?

Love the story.
the chapters seem almost to fast paced

I follow you but you could take away a doubt as you would like to orchestrate this fic from now on in the various narrative arcs.?

Mia scared the deities way but it's a double-edged sword as he needs to spend money now.

it's okay this was a pretty good chapter and I was only talking about the critic because he/she was unnecessarily harsh. So is he going to keep running into gods now or is loki going to "stake a claim"?

First of all, I like how you threw shade at The Critic. They definitely had it coming for the unreasonable insults. Second, the chapter itself was great except for one thing. The way you capitalized everything Mia said was like she normally is extremely loud. Try to keep it at a normal tone unless the moment calls for her to be very loud.

Wow the critic is a fucking prick. What kind of wanker calls themselves an intellectual,
don't take any notice of him he's a cunt

Hey man, sorry about the hatch words from The Critic. While you should improve your fanfic, I feel that their words went too far. If your going to criticize someone, give constructive criticism on how they can make it better instead of going off on them for no reason.

Kiss for the 2nd chapter, wtf for the 3rd, nc 2nd chap I was confused with the red head in the inn kep imagining a girl only to relize it was welf

Utmost disappointing ,Your writing skill is comparable to a toddler ,the pacing the atmosphere of your peaces is purely embarrassing i did read all of your peaces that you wrote before and i cannot say i didn't feel every peace of my being "cringing" as the kids would say.
Alas not all of the people on this website are intellectuals like myself but you could clearly see that this person calling themselves LegancyZ , an artist that writes fanfcition should give us joy, the sense of wonder and every emotion in between., but this writer only gets the worst emotions out of me mostly anger and second hand embarrassment.

TLDR: STOP
-The Critic

wow you got my hopes up for a cheep joke I liked you you're better than this